The sky is a livid vivid blue-black The scorched torched clouds sheared speared seared by jagged bolts of light---- the clouds are tortured tattered shattered PULSATING Rotating Animated Agitated Roiling Boiling >>>>Concentrated<<<< into a swirling whirling funnel of uncontrolled fury! A maelstrom savaging ravaging raping scraping cartwheeling congealing revealing its true nature look deep ___ __ _ AND BEHOLD THE EYE OF THE STORM.
(C) Copy written, 2003, by Karla Dorman.
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Reviews of "Funnel (Repost)"
Reviewed by Fletcher Bailey (Reader)
Reviewed on June 21, 2004
Karla...this is magnificito...great use of the words to shape the twister...into a tongue twister...excellent poem...very smooth flow unlike a real tornado...hugs back to you...Fletcher B
Thats right Karla, send that out when I am high, I can barely read when I am sober, let alone read something that spins like a tornado any other time...it is a fine read though, scary enough to make me not want to ever witness the power of that part of Nature...Peace thru Underground Shelters, Ed & Rufuz
Excellent write and neat form, Karla. I'm here with a broken finger, but here, nonetheless. I hope you are well and are surviving the heat. It's humid and sweltering here today. Keep up the great writes.
(((((((HUGS)))))) and Love,
Jill :)
WOW! What an image-filled maestrom; could feel and imagine the fury of the storm as I read it! BRAVA on a fine, uniquely creative piece!
loved the internal rhyming; EXCELLENT!!
(((HUGS))) and much love, your twin, karen lynn. :D
Very crafty, Karla! I have always wanted to do something like this too with words, but somehow, everything I writed begins from the left...unless I quote it center, then it moves to center; but cannot do a stylish one like this.
Perhaps "..Quiet Storm" will help rekindle old flames buried and long forgotten or express the love so deeply locked inside of your soul longing to be released.
Regardless of where you may be found in love this beautiful masterpiece can be
way. Great write, Karla.
Superb writing and the shape is scary!
Great work!
Hoovsie
God Bless
Michelle R Kidwell
Very well done!
Andrea
Clever and educating write .
Peter Paton
very exciting imagery and style!
(((((((HUGS)))))) and Love,
Jill :)
loved the internal rhyming; EXCELLENT!!
(((HUGS))) and much love, your twin, karen lynn. :D
Creative indeed and a good write.
~ Sandie Angel :o) ~