You have a typo in the line -hoping someone sees here there-I think you meant her not here. I like the poem. You do an excellent job with human nature poems. I like the two line line rhyme scheme, also. I might try that. Nice job. I'm gonna read more of yours but probably not comment on them.
You are remarkable, CJ, to pen a poem such as this. I'll say this though, I feel sorry for all broken-hearted men and women. They shouldn't have to face that awful pain, still, I don't believe revenge is the way to heal a broken heart.
No where, no time, no how is anything or anybody free from the imagination of a poet. You know CJ, she may have been collecting donations for the Salvation Army. (snicker...snort). All the great components of a good poem. Wonderfully written.
Here's looking at you kid Hugs
Rusty
Your attention to detail, and your acumen for innovation stands out in this fly on the wall poem..
Great stuff !
Love and Hugs
Peter
Reviewed by Dove JoAnne Cromp (Reader)
Reviewed on October 16, 2006
Powerful accound dearest CJ!!!
Love, Dove
Reviewed by Shinya Yawakazi (Reader)
Reviewed on October 16, 2006
Aww..wow this is a really good poem and you wrote it on a napkin as well lol.Very good job at detailing it and the scene of which you said it took place^_^
“Being a couple yet free is our next challenge on the evolutionary ladder. This book successfully helps us unravel the myths that block that achievement. It does it with warmth, with readability, and with balance. It recreates everyday problems and
I met Jerome on a busy city street in Baltimore, Maryland, when he was forty-five years old. On that particular day, I was out and about, enjoying a much-needed day off from work.
I wanted to purchase a sukiyaki sub. I parked my car in an area of
CJ
this would make a great CW song
Steve Robertson
(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.
Love Tinka
BTW did you get her number? tell tell tell..
Much love...God Bless
Lena
Regis
Fee
Here's looking at you kid Hugs
Rusty
I agree with Dark Angel below
Your attention to detail, and your acumen for innovation stands out in this fly on the wall poem..
Great stuff !
Love and Hugs
Peter
Love, Dove