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Left out by the Chamber of Commerce {sl'ly revised}
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Your responses to the last poem I posted -- re the 'Carnival' that a modern city represents -- are very heartening. T h a n k s !! As I mentioned in the introduction, the blight that strikes at or near dawn {as viewed from a train} was what I had intended to focus on. Couldn't let it go! 'Left out' is anything but a carnival. . .probably all too clear. Hope to offer something a little lighter next time. But. . .so much darkness, so little time? I am shutting up now. . .AM. . .
xox peace xox




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It takes chain-smoking for the train
and me to make it through the unveiling
of one of the self-disfigured faces
of a feverish, drugged-to-sleep city
that has been encouraged to hide behind
an interchange and columns of smoke.
I have yet to see a sign identifies.
Scars bad, but what shakes is the feeling 
people have long been misused -- worse,
abused -- behind the factory windows
that have been white-washed over
to keep eyes from prying.  Too much
green lost as fields, pastures, and lawns
were gobbled by tracks and seeded
with gravel, and people turned to cogs
for a burgeoning machine.  How
many gains and losses do houses
that could double as lean-to’s speak
of with their skinny, up-and-down
porches and tomato-canned sale-flowers
wilting to brown for lack of time
to water?   Dirt on the ground, in the air,
and decaying brick and metal siding
and suggestion of unnatural stillness
whisper that farmers once looked upon
this land with the pride, guts, and know-
how to keep growing the best they could.
Teach their children to.  Trains like the one
clacking and huffing me to new classes
and a new love sped communication
and led to unheard-of luxury.  Other pluses,
one supposes.  But the price shows
in discarded iron shoes, rusted drums, rebars,
monster cranes, and just plain trash.
Buildings whose single saving grace
is they will do.  Smoke, fumes, and drinking-
water-headed poison and unidentified
lying objects. . .at last, humor comes to
my rescue.  If only it could rescue workers
from losing to planned obsolescence
and buck-the-bottom-line, but no.  Lives
of many as hard and gray as the asphalt
over there.  Here comes a sign.   Billboard
ad, billboard ad, billboard ad.  Still,
I’m getting glimpses of the pretty part.
Lights around perfect teeth grinning
at a fifth of Wild Turkey.   Fishing
out a weed, I light up.

 

            (c) Phyllis Jean Green, August, 2007

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 Reviews of "Left out by the Chamber of Commerce {sl'ly revised}"
Reviewed by Elizabeth Price
Reviewed on August 13, 2007
Great imagery. You capture the desolute underbelly that the Chamber of Commerce doesn't want you or anyone else to see. Great economy we have going where the have nots are blamed for their own demise as the boss man hires illegals for day labor. Oh oh. Now back to your poem. Obviously your poem struck a cord in me that I relate to. I'll light up my weed too. Excellent. Liz

Reviewed by Kate Burnside
Reviewed on August 10, 2007
You've captured that sense of journeying well, Phyllis. As we rev up as we reach the heart of the city, perhaps, we are only too aware of the urban canvas against which our pulse quickens... often the deprivation and "washed-up"-ness of it all - making a stark contrast with our sense of purpose and forward motion. Reminds me so much of pulling into Paddington... line upon line of balcony laundry balefully swinging in the polluted atmosphere. If I smoked, I would light up too.... Thanks for this. Could feel it. Great atmosphere. Kate xx

Reviewed by Dale Clark
Reviewed on August 10, 2007
Ah yes, the ugly city! I value my freedom
out here in the boondocks, well not for long
they're building houses everywhere. Great Pea!

Reviewed by Joyce Bowling
Reviewed on August 10, 2007
A clever approach as is a unique one my friend, enjoyed this much...talented indeed!
Blessings,
Joyce B.

Reviewed by Rose Rideout
Reviewed on August 9, 2007
Exceptional write Phyllis, sad but reality. Thank you for sharing.

Rose

Reviewed by Tinka Boukes
Reviewed on August 8, 2007
Mind boggling write....need weed to NOT feel this one!!

Sad offering me thinks!!

Love Tinka

Reviewed by George Thompson
Reviewed on August 8, 2007
What a remarkable write you've penned! As seen from a chugging train; this is unique in approach and "certainly" stands up to the quality of a well written poem. Applause!

George

Reviewed by Chantilly Lace (Reader)
Reviewed on August 8, 2007
Great writing,Hugsssssss

Reviewed on August 8, 2007
(((Pea))),

The scenery unfolds in heartbreaking detail on the tracks of imagination. Excellent capture of what "they" want you to see, and of what's R E A L I T Y. Well done.

(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.

Reviewed by Ron (sketchman) Axelson (Reader)
Reviewed on August 7, 2007
Yes, they always put the prettist people in their ads.
Waste land in abundance from your view.
thanks for sharing this.

Reviewed by Karen Palumbo
Reviewed on August 7, 2007
Touching on those subjects that ate seemingly taboo. Keep writing, you give a picturesque description from that train......

Be safe,
Karen

Reviewed by Felix Perry
Reviewed on August 7, 2007
STrong as the last and with just as much bite, I can feel and see the sights unfold as if sitting there beside you on that train looking across you as we both digest the city with our eyes.


Fee

Reviewed by D Johnson
Reviewed on August 7, 2007
Really good write,

thanks,
Dan


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