artwork by Amor Sabor ; watercolor 1988 "Girl in Formal" no unauthorized duplication allowed
"Polypropylene Sky"
She was surrounded by a polypropylene sky
clouds of marshmallows in amniotic solutions
She once introduced me to neoprene sunsets
when I was convinced the world was not looking
but I scoffed as she attempted to measure heaven
while she stood tiptoe on a particle board dream
reaching towards the ceiling with an inverted broom
I dismissed it because I hoped she would love me
proving it somehow in the form of sound pressure
and I thought I had come down from the mountain
but she proved me wrong and I remained silent
regrettably licking sea salt from the bathroom mirrors
after the thick sensuous fog had slipped slowly away
and it was then when I started to believe in her laws
when feelings I had for her suddenly pointed north
and I would be a compass in her Bermuda triangle
because my fantasies would be merely theories
as she knew the answers to all of my questions
when she analyzed me with Bunsen burner eyes
exposing me as residue at the bottom of a beaker
She had a stainless steel heart that beat within
impervious to the intensity of any of my emotions
Cold physics would dictate how I should love her
a biological fact in a half-sanitized Styrofoam world
but she failed to differentiate human touch from plastic
and all of the warmth in my soul would never thaw it
Powerful words, you've written. What is it with some of us? Always falling for those who are the least likely to love us back. Your discription of her carried so much insight into her personality -- it needed no further evaluation -- and you did it just right. Good write!
Carmen
Reviewed by Floria Kelderhouse (Reader)
Reviewed on December 13, 2003
Amor..this is glorious expression....love the poetry..."laughing at some of the replies"....she simply did not deserve you is how I see it Amor...the watercolor is fabulous...I am working in that media now and it is very difficult...no changes can be made once that brush touched the paper....lovely work....poem and art...you are very talented...have a great holiday friend....floria
This poem is stunning, Amor, and your heartbreak is so sharply and clearly expressed that it is possible to feel the pain and disappointment. Deeply touching, and the artwork is also quite awesome.
Blessings, Dreams, infinite Inspiration,
~Alexandra~
Amor, She sure sounds like a heartbreaker to me! The watercolor fantastic, your poem like a story, your words chosen carefully, defining the meaning of that which is untouchable &
unreachable...free will. No matter how hard you try you can't make someone love you! The woman in the poem sounds like she is everything you are not...you are better off without her!
What a wonderful description of an unhealthy relationship. "I dismissed it because I hoped [s]he would love me". Geez, I see this every day with the women I work with (victims of abuse). "and all of the warmth in my soul would never thaw it". Bullseye! Outstanding work, my friend.
Great poem my friend and I LOVE this line, "but I scoffed as she attempted to measure heaven while she stood tiptoe on a particle board dream" That is GOOD, your metaphors are great.
Love, Janet xoxoxo
Reviewed by Kate Clifford (Reader)
Reviewed on December 11, 2003
Sounds like she wasn't ready for real love. Wonderful write.
Reviewed by Ron (sketchman) Axelson (Reader)
Reviewed on December 11, 2003
She sounds stuck on herself..
excellent art work Amor..
Have Some Great Holidays!
A collection of love poetry both relatable and unique.. Poems both joyful, playfu , yearning and romantic. The Poet has exposed his heart and soul in words of love and admiration. Take a journey through the thoughts of a Contempary poet of love. Poet
Dozens of Frequently Asked Questions regarding Pathological Narcissism, relationships with abusive narcissists, and the Narcissistic Personality Disorder.
Share
Print
Save
Follow
Carmen
Smooth, rythmatic writing that always reminds me of music.
Excellent word selection!
~Chrissie
your feelings. Excellent!
Reindeer
Blessings, Dreams, infinite Inspiration,
~Alexandra~
Your so masterful this and the art so superb!
Peg
Merry Christmas to you and yours.
You are quite the artist....wheeeew!!
Love Tinka
unreachable...free will. No matter how hard you try you can't make someone love you! The woman in the poem sounds like she is everything you are not...you are better off without her!
What a wonderful description of an unhealthy relationship. "I dismissed it because I hoped [s]he would love me". Geez, I see this every day with the women I work with (victims of abuse). "and all of the warmth in my soul would never thaw it". Bullseye! Outstanding work, my friend.
Hugs,
Tami
Love, Janet xoxoxo
excellent art work Amor..
Have Some Great Holidays!