She's on the Edge (poem) by Regis Auffray on AuthorsDen

Reviewed on September 23, 2014

I upload you for tackling a poem where all the lines have the same rhyme. It is not always easy to do without making it sound cheesy or forced.

To me the poem doesn't flow smoothly from beginning to end but maybe it is just me and the way I am reading it.

Reviewed by Kathleen McDonald

Reviewed on August 17, 2014

Outstanding work Regis

hug
Kathi

Reviewed by - - - - - TRASK

Reviewed on July 15, 2014

Really Regis You Should Just Turn Walk Away
And Do Not (Never) Look Back!

TRASK...

Reviewed by Linda Hill

Reviewed on July 10, 2014

Regis,

Enjoyed this poem.

Love and blessings,
Linda

Reviewed by CHERYL WARNER

Reviewed on July 8, 2014

VERY NICE ,

Reviewed by lois christensen

Reviewed on July 7, 2014

True feelings hurt sometimes.

Reviewed by Elisabeth Barstowe

Reviewed on July 6, 2014

Strong poem. Evokes an image of somebody who's feelings have spiraled out of control in a good way and excitement follows her every step.

Reviewed by William Bonilla

Reviewed on July 6, 2014

an excellent piece Regis it reminds me of someone I know
the words fit to a "T"
Peace be with you

William

Reviewed by Patrick Granfors

Reviewed on July 5, 2014

Ah Love, that magic tightrope without a net below. Happy landings. Patrick

Reviewed by Ed Matlack

Reviewed on July 5, 2014

Dear doll who wishes to fall,
Please do not as I am on the pavement below,
And if you land on me I will for the rest of my life have to crawl,
So get it together, don't bawl,
Over spilt milk & urban sprawl,
I beseech thee, please don't take the plunge at all...e

Reviewed by E Phillips

Reviewed on July 4, 2014

It looks like many of us like to take that fall...

Reviewed by Lily of Lough Neagh C. Dennis-Woosley

Reviewed on July 4, 2014

I love the imagery Regis and how it's worded
But... please both of you don't fall...
There is always a good ending if you wish it...

Love and Light
Lily

Reviewed by Rebekah Rosie Lang

Reviewed on July 3, 2014

Happy July 4th Regis! Good poem! It catches your attention! Super!

Reviewed by Christine Tsen

Reviewed on July 3, 2014

Super cute! Blessings and Happy Fourth Regis :)
Chris

Reviewed by Morgan Merriweather

Reviewed on July 3, 2014

Sounds like a dreamy ride. Nice surprise ending.

Reviewed by Debby Rosenberg

Reviewed on July 3, 2014

have a great fall!

Reviewed by D Johnson

Reviewed on July 3, 2014

Really well done ... I like this
Cheers,
Dan

Reviewed by Ronald Hull

Reviewed on July 3, 2014

I think I know her from your poetic description. And I think you'd rather not fall "with" her, but "for" her. That is, unless she's too far gone.

I much prefer, although it is rather boring, for you to be "wandering the mall" with her, than falling�

Ron

Reviewed by Jane Noponen Perinacci

Reviewed on July 3, 2014

I know the feeling all too well. Chin up, both of you. Great imagery!

Love ya!

Jane

Reviewed by Clarence Prince

Reviewed on July 3, 2014

If she doesn't fall, she could be the next in line to walk across the falls! Well done, Regis!

Reviewed by Annabel Sheila

Reviewed on July 3, 2014

A tragedy ready to unfold...well done, Regis...

Anna

Reviewed by Isabella Koldras

Reviewed on July 3, 2014

...an imaginative poem charmer...with a gusto
for storytelling...that keeps your reader "on
the edge"...There are moments when we feel as
if we are...almost unable to make the slightest
move...for own advantage...and/or someone's
protection...yet "want to fall"...Relax!
The strongest-invisible hand...softly...magically
catches you both...Go for it...
Thank you Regis, for sharing your poem. Blessings!

Reviewed by neerja gandhi (Reader)

Reviewed on July 3, 2014

Ohh.. This is just so wonderful poem :)
My love's fallen and am floating around happily. .might collapse dead anytime :)
loved this poem of yours
My best wishes to you
thanks too :)

Reviewed by Sandie May Joyce (Sandie Angel)

Reviewed on July 2, 2014

Regis, I hope this is just a poem. Sometimes even if we want to help someone, it is impossible to reach that someone when our help is not accepted. Then at the end we are the ones that would end up being hurt.

Sandie

Reviewed by John Domino

Reviewed on July 2, 2014

Nice one Regis. Reminds me of that old rock tune, "Free Falling". Well done!

Reviewed by Jerry Bolton

Reviewed on July 2, 2014

Kickass poetry!

Reviewed by SHERRY HEIM

Reviewed on July 2, 2014

She is feeling so small
Though she's quite tall
She is afraid of it all
She can't here the call
She's leapt from the wall
She's lost in the fall
She knows nothing at all

Nice rhythm in this piece, Reg.

Reviewed by Ann Marquette

Reviewed on July 2, 2014

Very good Regis :-)