I wrote a poem with a similar theme for a friend when her son was shot. I like to think it helped her. I know there's things she would have said to him - for that reason, and many more, this piece grabs me by the heart. Too many people don't say what they should say when their loved one is still alive. Well crafted & a tender moment. Not sure if we're allowed suggestions but I was wondering if "quite" in the last line would sound more effective as 'perfectly'. Has a better ring, but I understand this is your masterpiece & it IS a masterpiece. Hugs.
Fever apart, your loving sentiments resonate loud and clear within my heart and mind, Paul. The ageing process is a shock and something which we wish to deny in our most beloved parents, I think. The pain and the "stay of hand" are both palpable here. May your love for each other increase with every passing moment so that you will both be forever fully assured that your closeness could never be bettered or ruptured. I wrote in similar terms in my poem, A Terrible Hardness. Bless you, and the fact that this was your Father's Day gift and tribute makes this even more special. With love, Kate xx
Both so lucky!! How well you express your love and admiration and respect. . .your dad must be so proud. Happy Father's Day -- however belated -- to you both. May you enjoy many, many more!! 'Pea' <3
What a beautiful tribute, Paul. I also agree with what the others wrote too.
May the Lord Jesus bless you, and those whom you love, and be with you always, and at your side constantly. With much love in my heart, joy to the world, peace on earth, & ((((((((((MANY WONDERFUL SISTERLY HUGGGGSSSS)))))))))), your sister, Barbie
Such a beautiful write my friend, a warm and sincere tribute from the heart! Time passes all too quickly...seems as if days of youth passed slowly, then as we grew older the days began to speed by...much like in the bible when James compared life to vapor on water...a touching write indeed, I'm a bit late on the review, but still touched my heart! Enjoyed!
Blessings,
Joyce B.
Reviewed by Susan Cook-Jahme (Reader)
Reviewed on June 22, 2007
Hi Paul...just popping in to visit old AD friends and found this poem so evocative and touching.
Susan
myspace.com/happyscribbler
An especially tender tribute to the most important role model of your life ( the Dad)
It's refreshing to read...."the simplest things said in this life mean the most"
Ty Paul
Blessings to you
Ch'erie
Paul,
This is such a tender tribute, just remembering one thing, life and death are part of the natural cycle. His soul and energy remain always with you...
Peace, Love, and Light,
Amber Moonstone
A loving tribute to your father, penned with the growing realization of precious memories and ever so precious days remaining. Many of the sweetest days with my father were spent on borrowed time.
Would they could walk with us again ... so hold close your this time together.
I enjoyed reading ever so much...
..jeanne
Reviewed by Theresa curnow (Reader)
Reviewed on June 19, 2007
How beautiful and moving Paul. A wonderful tribute to your beloved father. Life is too short and we never seem to say the things we want to say but I hope you said all that you needed to. God bless, love to you, Theresa.
I read this with fresh eyes, Paul. My father just passed away in May and, although I knew it was coming, I struggle with his death for many reasons. I think I will struggle with this for a long time to come. Even so, I could FEEL your words and transfer them to emotions I have held for my father. Oh, crap... I'm rambling.
It's very good to read you again, my friend.
Great rhythm!
Paul, this is such a beautifully written tribute to your Dad, the words say so much about your relationship with your Dad. Time is fleeting and yes, we must let our loved one's know how we feel because none of us know when the last hour for either person will come calling. I truly loved the rhyme and rhythm of this poem.
A very heartfelt write
I agree with Linda this poem speaks Volumes
But its' great that your enjoying a last walk
With your dad and the chance to tell
Him how much you love him Never a goodbye
For he will remain in your heart!!
A very powerful heartfelt write it brought tears to my heart!
Love Peace..Morning Star
Where are all our yesterdays ?
How quickly they have passed.
With no tomorrows on this list,
I pray today will last.
So much said in this verse, my friend. It speaks VOLUMES! I wished so much I could have had one last walk with my Dad. One last chance to say goodbye. This is a powerful and heartfelt write, Paul. A keeper!
Each person is but a grain of sand resting beside the sea. This thought sets the tone for Jill Eisnaugle’s latest poetry collection, Beside Still Waters.
Contraband Marriage, traveling along the hemline of loving after incarceration, is a love story written in lyric and free form, set in reality with a different ever after.
Each person is but a grain of sand resting beside the sea. This thought sets the tone for Jill Eisnaugle’s latest poetry collection, Beside Still Waters.
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May the Lord Jesus bless you, and those whom you love, and be with you always, and at your side constantly. With much love in my heart, joy to the world, peace on earth, & ((((((((((MANY WONDERFUL SISTERLY HUGGGGSSSS)))))))))), your sister, Barbie
Blessings,
Joyce B.
Susan
myspace.com/happyscribbler
It's refreshing to read...."the simplest things said in this life mean the most"
Ty Paul
Blessings to you
Ch'erie
This is such a tender tribute, just remembering one thing, life and death are part of the natural cycle. His soul and energy remain always with you...
Peace, Love, and Light,
Amber Moonstone
A loving tribute to your father, penned with the growing realization of precious memories and ever so precious days remaining. Many of the sweetest days with my father were spent on borrowed time.
Would they could walk with us again ... so hold close your this time together.
I enjoyed reading ever so much...
..jeanne
Be safe,
Karen
It's very good to read you again, my friend.
Great rhythm!
Hugs to you,
Tami
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Love Tinka
Losing my mom was very difficult and now, with my father approaching 83, it makes me think...
"...You promised always to be near.
That's how it's meant to be.
Knowing you are moving on
is especially hard for me."
It's, "The time of our life", in another voice...
Excellent write! God Bless our dads!
Love and Peace~
Kimmy~
(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.
I agree with Linda this poem speaks Volumes
But its' great that your enjoying a last walk
With your dad and the chance to tell
Him how much you love him Never a goodbye
For he will remain in your heart!!
A very powerful heartfelt write it brought tears to my heart!
Love Peace..Morning Star
This poem brings tears.
Where are all our yesterdays ?
How quickly they have passed.
With no tomorrows on this list,
I pray today will last.
So much said in this verse, my friend. It speaks VOLUMES! I wished so much I could have had one last walk with my Dad. One last chance to say goodbye. This is a powerful and heartfelt write, Paul. A keeper!
Many blessings,
~Linda