This is like catching something haunting and mysterious in peripheral vision. The repetitions of meaning work tremendously well, coupled with the slippery feel of the words to convey feelings of ambivalence and confusion. Intriguing and arousing, and done without overstating each phase - achieved by your original use of diction. Makes the hairs on my neck stand on end! Very good work, Erin, thank you. Kate xx

Your imagery plants the scene in my mind - well done, Erin -

(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.