god...how, oh...'voided by...nay sayed by... self...again, you put it all out there and oh, what gifts, and yes, when those cannot even be made use of...how too too well you've captured the painful darkness of numb/depressed 'shadows' ...you, god, how, again, again i feel this, and oh damn, i know this, but how well you've made a picture of something so hard to describe...my, what heart/soul and thank god, you brilliance does 'say'...here and elsewhere...many thanks, erin, ah!

heavy on the soul...like wet garments against the heart...**Mari**

Some serious writing ...enjoyed it...

This is a ship shape write
i thought that be-fore i read it and again Aft-er I read it
I hope my comment is not too Stern i think i'll mellow and pour some Port

Very strong write, wonderful use of image. Great sense of place. I enjoyed this piece. Thank you, and thank you for your wonderful comments concerning my work. I am grateful.

Be well,
Michael

quality

Erin,
I felt this one, and it is strong!

Hugs,
Maria

Cant go boating ..no need floating.. so.. I guess you are going to drown in your dreams? (There has to be a better way of going...) (Would say cumming .. but I shouldnt go there.) (shoot me ok!!)

I no longer own a boat, but oh how I do miss the water. Very nice.
Tim

know the feeling ... you have breathed new life into the notion "dead in the water" and yet ... there is in this piece, the absolute painful effort to breathe at all.

"as damp fears fall on battered roof,
invasively drowning life. "
These are awesome lines Erin. Great poem. Floria

Today is 70 and I feel like going but the water is cold as hell. Nay say I.