Moving in Time
by Erin Elizabeth Kelly-Moen — Read all 1,670 poems by Erin Elizabeth Kelly-Moen
Tuesday, October 28, 2003
Do I move you, do you feel me?
Do I make you want to flinch?
I give emotions that special twist,
want you to view my deathless wish,
to be forever etched, with my light.
Do you perceive me? I can see you,
your subjectiveness is up for grabs.
I take your emotions and design my rhyme,
revealing a moment’s fleeting time,
and capturing a piece of Mankind's face.
Do we comprehend our gift of mind?
Can we flourish with imagination primed?
Is it possible to carry earth’s weight
as we continually subjugate our wills
to practical restraints of limitations?
When we move past uneasy truths,
do we enter a different spiritual truce?
It seems impossible to escape
the neediness of a thinking race
who can’t believe in eternity.
Do we move time? Can we find ways
to elevate our souls above the earth,
that has taught us the rules of mutating birth -
evolution’s anxious crutch to stay alive -
while we have blindness of physical sight?
Do you move me? Do you free me?
Do you make me want to flinch?
You give emotions realities twist,
I want to view your deathless wish,
so I can be forever etched, by your light.
Erin Moen
10/28/03
Copyright 2003 ©
so I can be forever etched, by your light"
Now there's a line! I do believe in eternity
BTW! ;)
Do you make me want to flinch?
You give emotions realities twist,
I want to view your deathless wish,
so I can be forever etched, by your light.
Very layered.. Bravo!!
Oh shit, (man), this is fantabulistic!
There are so many incredibly mind-exploding images here, Erin!
For instance, this one:
want to take you to view my deathless wish,
to be forever etched on your mind, with my light.
and what about this little Shellian truth, folks?
It seems impossible to escape
the neediness of a thinking race
who can’t believe in eternity.
Well, Percy Bysshe Shelley and Erin Moen and Tyler Joseph Wiseman and Sara Russell and Bradley Alexander Bucsis and Robin Ouzman Hislop and Dani and and and ALL the poets I've listed as my favourites in my "blog" ARE the voice(s) of eternity....
as simple as that!
A MASTERPIECE!
Please submit for publication in Poetry in Emotion, Erin.
And, Friends, watch for this poet, she will go down in history as one of America's Emily Dickinsons. Mark my words.
Richard Vallance,
Ottawa, Ontario,
CANADA
Allen
to be forever etched on your mind, with my light.' Worthy wish. Good exploration of relationship. Good writing, Erin.
Carmen
God Bless
~Michelle~