The twilight of my dreams
Is filled with words
Clashing with one another
While in a state of limbo
I awaken from my dream
Waiting to be folded
Into each other
Like egg white fluff
Into a cake mix.
They present themselves
Just before dawn
As sleep still dominates
My thoughts
Dumbfounded And baffled
I try to make sense
Of it all.
No rhythm, no rhymes no verses
No sonnets nor poems
None worthy of romancing
Into lines
Of a love song
Nothing sinking in
The sponge is dry
The surface harden
With stubbornness.
I know these feelings, William; when one is "empty of words." I am often in that state and I refuse to "force" myself to write. So I wait for inspiration. I can relate to what is expressed in your verses here. Thank you. Love and peace to you,
ah, but stubborness creates such unique textures, william.
me thinks you've got another winner (like this write) swirling
round that dreaming head of yours.
peace,
carolyn
Boy, don't I know those feelings...those thoughts just before waking always seem to be perfect, then you awake and they vanish...love this one William
love and peace, Carole
Reviewed by Michael Mathieu (Reader)
Reviewed on February 22, 2007
Thoughts of a poet,We all tend to lose our nightly thoughts, If I awaken and don't immediately write thoughts down,then they're gone...
Excellent William,
Michael
Guess we poets need to have a notepad at the side of our bed so we can jot down what's running through our heads. Perhaps wake up, write down a little then return to sleep. Very good write.
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Love,
Susan
Regis
'Waiting to be folded
Into each other
Like egg white fluff
Into a cake mix.'
That surface can't be too hardened, to produce a beautiful turn of verses like this!
You're a renowned NY (Retired) Policeman, William....you can breakthrough ANY stubborn surface!!!
Love and Hugs and Respect,
Rhonda
me thinks you've got another winner (like this write) swirling
round that dreaming head of yours.
peace,
carolyn
Blessing,
Joselyn
you did words well here
you convey the message well
enjoyed and have know the feelings!!!
love and peace, Carole
Excellent William,
Michael
Love Tinka
The mute's scream.
Great.
Georg
George
You pulled it off though~
love and Peace~
Kimmy~