Sunrise like sunset dance playfully through me,
With visions soft of dangling eyes, my heart.
I caress you in my mind, sighing happy
That touching you suggests fear to depart.
Morning and evening are but the same time,
For each becomes celestial space for us.
Like fragrant flowers at their dancing prime,
Your silence loud in its strong warm adjust.
Illusions are always vague and unclear,
Of happy and sad, longing and desire.
Of things left vacant other desperate cheer,
Through what we were and what we expired.
My love, you will always be the sun to me,
With heart inclined to constant memory.
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Reviews of "Sunrise Like Sunset Dance Playfully Through Me"
Romantic and sweet. So good to know there are a lot of other romantics who refuse to give in to crassness and cynicism.
x:)x Phyllis x:)x
N: Jerry's right about the dangling eyes; maybe something like "with visions of your soft, tantalizing eyes?" Maybe w/o soft? Just a thought. Don't mean to meddle!
Mary Angela Nangini's poems celebrate the richness of life and love. From the city to cottage-country and the roads in between, Nangini explores the changing seasons of her varied region. (This book will soon be reprinted in hard cover.)
This is a book of free verse poetry that addresses the seven main tests in life and offers some sensible solutions to passing those tests with minimal discomfort.
x:)x Phyllis x:)x
N: Jerry's right about the dangling eyes; maybe something like "with visions of your soft, tantalizing eyes?" Maybe w/o soft? Just a thought. Don't mean to meddle!
Ron
Other than that the sonnet is well-written and lovely. I'd seriously try to get rid of the dangling eyes though.