it's some inner-weakness
that i try to repress
instead of address--
it says that i'm less
than what i thought i was
or want to be--
it opens the door
and sets my insecurities free--
i see
parts of myself
unravelled and undone--
swimming in the possibilities
of what i could have become--
and i wanna run
forward
but i can only regress
and feel mildly depressed
until...
a vision!
where those parts of myself--
unravelled and undone--
merge into one
and allow me to be
all that i am.
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Reviewed by Jerry Andrews (Reader)
Reviewed on June 29, 2008
Just remember- You're not a finished product and never will be-but you're aware and will always keep trying. That's the best any of us can do and it's enough! Jerry
Reviewed by Jerry Andrews (Reader)
Reviewed on July 17, 2005
First a suggestion: read Candy Gourlay(South African) and Dani( Australian)- The two best here, I think. Mention my name and get a good seat.Laughing quietly.
Ilike this poem a lot. You have something to say and a rythmic way of laying the words and ideas out. Good job. Don't ever stop. You're a natural, baby. Jerry
Reviewed by ya mama (Reader)
Reviewed on January 29, 2004
this is a great poem. I tend to stay away from rhyme poetry (because most is sooo bad) but you did a wonderful job on this.
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Ilike this poem a lot. You have something to say and a rythmic way of laying the words and ideas out. Good job. Don't ever stop. You're a natural, baby. Jerry