and i used "i feel..." lines as if itemized and categorized you would listen yet my words remain, unclaimed baggage on airport carousels
you asked for walls that i may be your museum- a ton of bricks on a leash
like the way time slows or stops in crisis [or math exams] yes... this is falling in slow [e]motion
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Reviewed by Rafika Anderson (Reader)
Reviewed on January 28, 2008
The imagery in this piece is evocative and rich and the flow contributes to the effective approach to the topic. Nicely crafted work that pulls in the reader and creates a potent picture to experience.
Your words will seems to be lake unclaimed baggage, but...258 reviews said that they are not taken with the wind of indifference.
Like Pink Floyd said...another brick on the wall!
Georg
Reviewed by blue soplain (Reader)
Reviewed on September 1, 2007
how you transcended and linked together the mundacity of ordinary things with the overused trite poeticness of what we try and create; the pedestrian 'i feel......' lines. ..such a clever one you are~ you made the words themselves slow. . .warp...a tesseract of vocabulary and images that are beyond what we perceive them as;
i get so flustered trying to pinpoint your exact notions/symbols/meanings b/c when i read your work, it seems as if theya re everywhere and so slightly lit up so that only the REAl reader [not the common ordinary one] can even attempt to decipher them; they are thinktanks of dreams, encyclopedias of beauty and gracefulness. . . such envy i have
grrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr
this is such a analytical precision write that makes one STOP
wow
ness
Lady J~ I love the depth in which you write!
This is exceptional BEAUTY and much said in each line, with a hint of sadness!
Thank you for sharing with an OPEN heart! and Soul!
Warmly, Warrior SheCat Purrs....
STay Positive!
STay SAFE!
Reviewed by Missy Cross (Reader)
Reviewed on September 1, 2007
O Cedric, you have outdone yourself here. I hope you don't mind if I save this, you've concocted so many images here that I just want to snack on again and again. Sorry I can't be more articulate than WOW.
J this is excellant work, I can feel your frustration and your pain and the images you conjured with the use of "I feel" line as well as the time example were great.
hugs
Fee
Rosetta was born in 1909 as the youngest of ten children. The family had more laughter than money and neighbors would knock on their door to ask, "Can we come in and laugh, too?"
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everything anessa has said is right on the money...
Like Pink Floyd said...another brick on the wall!
Georg
i get so flustered trying to pinpoint your exact notions/symbols/meanings b/c when i read your work, it seems as if theya re everywhere and so slightly lit up so that only the REAl reader [not the common ordinary one] can even attempt to decipher them; they are thinktanks of dreams, encyclopedias of beauty and gracefulness. . . such envy i have
grrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr
this is such a analytical precision write that makes one STOP
wow
ness
Be safe,
Karen
Aberjhani
This is exceptional BEAUTY and much said in each line, with a hint of sadness!
Thank you for sharing with an OPEN heart! and Soul!
Warmly, Warrior SheCat Purrs....
STay Positive!
STay SAFE!
hugs
Fee
Excellent. You pack much in small packages. Well done.
(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.
nice work...
Art Sun...