“What will become of my remains?”
“That depends. What were you in life?”
“I killed someone once, so I guess that makes me a murderer.”
“Were you punished?”
“Not yet, as it turns out, he was a god.”
“Do you feel remorse?”
“At first I did, and then I rejoiced in his death, we all did. We took his place. What will become of my remains?”
“Are you worried about them?”
“No, just curious. However, I would rather that they not be fed to dogs.”
“Are you sure you felt remorse?”
“I did, though the others appeared to revel in his demise.”
“There’s a lot to be said for remorse. It can go a long way, in the right company.”
“Once I saw a robin, at least he told me he was a robin; he was trained as a robin and carried a paper to prove it. Of course the paper was immediately suspect, as the bird was all black, and even though it clearly stated him to be a robin, when I asked him to sing, he could not. I wish I had a paper, something to validate me, prove that I was here. Some cultures burn them.”
“Papers?”
“No, remains. Will you be burning mine?”
“I think you’re stalling.”
“Hand me the razor.”
Mr. Mink nailed it. It's just an abstract about belief and faith.
Reviewed by David Mink (Reader)
Reviewed on May 12, 2016
Sort of leaves itself open for you to decide what is happening. Interesting to say the least, leaves room for all kinds of thoughts, any way one wishes to interpret it.
The last two lines offer the desired twist--I think?--But I'm not sure where your story is leading. It doesn't have to rhyme to be a poem, but it would help if it made sense.
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