Moment in Time
Is there a moment in time when you think you may have met that very special someone that makes you happy and forget.
Could this be something real or just a clouded fantasy moment in obscurity opaque, deceiving imagery!
Is the passion honest and pure or just some curious tendency do you really feel desire or just contemplating to conspire
Do you take the chance you're handed to see where it may flow will it take you to hell and back or to starlights heavenly glow?
Does the fire burn so strong within a truthful heart? or is it just a fancy line, to see what she'll impart !
Copyright E. Bretton August 2004- All Rights Reserved
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First rate prose - beautiful image - Bravo!
Robert
Question is: What will we regret more, when we are old? That we did it or that we didn't do it?
Excellent.
this is absolutely gorgeous--a marvelous work of art presented with much feeling--BRAVA!
(((HUGS))) and love, karla. :)
As a personal friend I have a little insight and although as a poet I would love to say 'follow your heart', the pragmatist in me says: 'Dip your toe in the water but don't dive in just yet.' I have the heart of a poet (as do you) and as a result am hopelessly romantic but experience has shown me that things are rarely as good as our hearts conceive. Don't lose your romanticism but also don't lose your head.
The poem is fabulous of course and as always you have taken such care with presentation. One of the things that I have always said to you when you've shared your poetry with me (privately, off AD), is that you have a flair for creating an impactful and memorable conclusion. The beginning of a poem should always draw us in (as should the promise of love), the body should captivate our imaginations (hmmm nuff said) and the conclusion should be impactful enough to stay with us. Your work meets all requirements.
I have watched your growth over this past year with admiration and pride. I don't comment enough on your poetry on AD because...hey I can just pick up the phone and tell you. Seems kinda silly to say it here too. I chose to do it this time because I have a feeling you're a little ummmm...distracted. ;-)
With love
Chanti
Great poem, the last stanza is top drawer.
Or to be or not to be, as Hamlet said.......
All that Glitters is not Gold..
Love
Peter
Enjoyed your read!!
Love Tinka
to see where it may flow?
Life is full of chances, and criss-crossed with numerous paths. One should always follow the heart.