a pink bouquet of roses
you placed beneath
my noses
well i know i have only one
but im rhyming here
so hush
then whispered softly to me
that you really want to f#*. me
no that wont work
ok start again
then whispered softly to me
and sounded just like a
buzzing bee
which really irratated the hell out of me
so i
told you to take your pink roses
and your rhyming proses
FOR THE LOVE OF GOD
uncle
i give
rythm i got
rhyme
sucks
will someone please tell me how to spell rythym
lord help me this is not that hard
one simple thing i ask my muse to do
just one simple rhyming poem
and what do i get
shit
HA
there is a god and a muse
and i am not amused
that my powers to call forth words
that rhyme for krimminey sakes
sucks
oh forget it
i ll leave it to the pros
ill just keep spitting out
dribble
I know i didn't talk about no purring kitties
with big fat titties
Please someone give me
a
0
really im going to work on this
i hereby respect each and everyone of you ten fold
after this feeble attempt
at structure
im going to bed now
before my muse
runs away for good
FOR THE LOVE OF GOD!!!!!
Chris i know
i suck
LOL
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Reviews of "my first attempt at poetry"
Reviewed by Jacqueline VanZandbeek (Reader)
Reviewed on June 14, 2002
You are so funny and talented. WOW I like your style. I will read your poetry forever. Thanks for making me smile.
Peace, Love, and Joy
Reviewed by Shae (Reader)
Reviewed on June 3, 2002
BRILLIANT, said Millicent.......ah forget it....WELL DONE!
hahaha this sure do suck!!!! But it sucks so good lol
I enjoyed it
Reviewed by Masarat Daud (Reader)
Reviewed on May 30, 2002
LOL...u sound much better than my first attempts hahahhaaha...oh god...i stole a bit of robert frost LOLOLOLLLL!!! I better not post that ever or I'll get beaten up...lol!
Reviewed by Masarat Daud (Reader)
Reviewed on May 30, 2002
I wrote a poem in rhyme and I can relate what you wrote.
Reviewed by Chris Stevens (Reader)
Reviewed on May 30, 2002
Well I just love your purring kitty poem!!!! ..... (helpful hint) duct tape keeps the muse from running!!!!! lol.... I just loved this one!!!!
Sixty-seven days after departing Flores Island in Europe’s westernmost waters, the schooner Heimdall and her stalwart crew has finally arrived at the mysterious Isla Socorro in the Revillagigedo Archipelagoes. The discoveries they make are astounding
Jack London’s cousin writes a heartwarming, young adult story about the glory of life. It is also a heart-pounding adventure to a new and strange world.
Peace, Love, and Joy
I enjoyed it
debby
I loved it you really set my day off with this one. I think I will be wearing a smile all day.
Thank you
Thank you
Thank you
Great write my friend,
Sharon;)