Hierarchy (poem) by Ronald W. Hull on AuthorsDen

Reviewed on March 12, 2014

But when the hierarchy crumbles,
and superiority no longer rules.
Which ride will you be on,
your own, or the ship of fools?

Certainly substance to reflect upon, Ron. Thank you. Love and peace to you,

Regis

Reviewed by ShyPoet 1

Reviewed on March 2, 2014

WoW - lol...

Poetic splendor ...4th stanza is my favorite...

P. S. - i suspect some of us can't chose our ships (dispite popular fokelore of this being a democracy)....

Reviewed by Patrick Granfors

Reviewed on February 28, 2014

Not really much safety in numbers, just a larger body count. Like most of the rest of us I'll just go down with the ship.

Reviewed by Michael True

Reviewed on February 25, 2014

A very powerful poem. We humans seem to have been born with a sense of connectivity, ever seeking the structure within which we fit the best. The downside is, there are only so many to choose from and most of those are inherently flawed. M.True

Reviewed by Kate Burnside

Reviewed on February 24, 2014

So many angles powerfully covered in this piece, Ron, yet each could be elaborated upon in detail. However, for some reason this verse really captures my attention:

There is safety in our numbers,
so like lemmings we procreate.
Our crowding makes us angry,
and closer to our Heaven's Gate

We want to have our cake and eat it; both play God and blame Him for our own gross stupidities. We've already chosen a different Captain of our Fate it seems to me: the one headed for Down Under.

... And now Jude really IS being tongue-in-cheek, I think! :) xx

Reviewed by Annabel Sheila

Reviewed on February 24, 2014

Very interesting...that second last stanza is one I firmly believe in. Really enjoyed this one, Ronald...read it over a few times...you nailed it! Well done...

Anna

Reviewed by Robert Whitford

Reviewed on February 23, 2014

Ever the social beings we tend to build hierarchys whether they are needed or not. Find an earthly paradise and we're sure to mess it up when we start figuring out governance, or that ever dependable standby, tyranny, which is much more easier than the strain of governance. Or even a republic, which we are in danger of loosing. We can be called a ship of fools rightly enough Ron. Bob

Reviewed by DM Yates (Reader)

Reviewed on February 23, 2014

I loved it. I've always been independent and radical and those who belong to their protective groups find me different, but I've learned that they can't seem to exist with their hierarchy-type groups.

Reviewed by Teresa Walker

Reviewed on February 23, 2014

This is very good Ron!
It is like the word insanity, doing the same thing over and over, expecting different results...
You said it in a nut shell...fools!

Very good write!
Teresa

Reviewed by Michael Schafer

Reviewed on February 23, 2014

This one blew me away.

Michael D.

Reviewed by J. Roseline

Reviewed on February 23, 2014

so philosophical Ron, I happened to miss thus wonderful piece coming out from the realms of your subconscious mind , all that you have gathered in the course of your lie. such maturity is not easily acquired-Jk

Reviewed by Mr. Ed

Reviewed on February 23, 2014

Unlike our non-human earthly neighbors, we have built a Ship of Fools,
And I sadly believe that one day our 'superiority' will no longer rule.

Reviewed by William Bonilla

Reviewed on February 22, 2014

an excellent write Ron
Peace be with you

William

Reviewed by Zainul

Reviewed on February 22, 2014

I became spell bound while reading the outstanding work.
Each stanza gives a vibrant story and a unique phenomenon.
There is a priceless lesson in each of them.
The last stanza embodies a great philosophical and mind blowing expression.
Congratulate you for the wonderful contribution!!!

Reviewed by Lakshmi Sharma

Reviewed on February 22, 2014

An edifying poem. Like your use of similes.

Reviewed by steve patterson

Reviewed on February 22, 2014

excellent poetry & a strong, true message. thanks for this read.

Reviewed by Debby Rosenberg

Reviewed on February 22, 2014

never understood the whole competitive thing, but believe its in the DNA subconscious pre programmed as a force to survival

Reviewed by Odin odin@aflx.com

Reviewed on February 22, 2014

Telling it like it is with allegory and lyricism. Arresting.

Reviewed by June Marshall

Reviewed on February 22, 2014

now you need to write one on how the top can destroy the base after they have worked so long to build it.

Reviewed by Sandie May Joyce

Reviewed on February 22, 2014

A well thought out and well constructed poem. Ron, I enjoyed this!

Sandie :o)

Reviewed by Budd Nelson

Reviewed on February 22, 2014

so well done Ron
budd

Reviewed by jude forese

Reviewed on February 22, 2014

Like the analagous references to bugs, animals, microscopic entities making their way through the structured pulse our existence as we know it ... very well written, Ron ...btw i believe ship of fools should be in parenthesis this way no one can accuse you of plagarism ...

Reviewed by Jane Noponen Perinacci

Reviewed on February 22, 2014

Write on!

Love ya!

Jane

Reviewed by Rhonda Galizia

Reviewed on February 22, 2014

Hi Ron!
I'll be on the One flight out.. and still "wowing" over the prophetic punch of your powerful poetic rendering! As I said.. WOW!
Love & Blessings,
Rv Rhonda

Reviewed by Mary Ann Biddinger

Reviewed on February 22, 2014

~Ron~
To the bee and the spider they are the good keepers of their
hierarchy. I'll be on my own. Splendid write.

Lady Mary Ann

Reviewed by E Phillips

Reviewed on February 22, 2014

You have set up a perfect example of amphiboly. Now watch as many of your readers fall victim to it by committing its rapacious fallacy by falsely inferring who steers and the ship of fools. Brilliant, Ron. One of your best.

Reviewed by Jerry Bolton

Reviewed on February 22, 2014

The ship of fools. Perfect wording for the present "in power" here in America. I was surprised you would call them that. A miracle.