They where huddled down inside the cave
When they heard a mighty roar
"This cave runs deep," the commander said
"We must leave and make for the shore"
They ran like blazes in the darkened night
They would take their boats and get away
But the scene of destruction, on the beach
Meant these men where here to stay
The boats were wrecked and torn apart
And the sailor began to cry
These men had come to rescue him
And now they were about to die
"It's not your fault," the captain said
"Why it's a set up, I believe
'Cause why send so many, armed like we are
For just one man to retrieve?"
"IT seems to me, they've known all along
That you've survived and did not die
They've been monitoring you for many years
And I'd like to know the reason why.
"I'll tell you why," the commander replied
"There's a creature here they want us to capture
And we like cannon fodder, have been sent in
Like lambs to the bloody slaughter"
"You're right," the men agreed as one
"But what can we do to survive?"
"We must go deeper into the cave
It must be done if we want to stay alive"
"You mean we must go and kill this thing?"
The sailor said, his voice full of fear
"That's exactly right," the commander replied
"And I will make this very clear"
"If we can find it when it's sleeping
Then our chances will greatly improve
But things may not be so good for us
If the creature is out on the move"
"You've seen what it has done to the others
Left them dead, like mince meat on a plate
But I don't intend to die like that
I don't want that to be our fate"
So the band of men crept into the cave
Their flashlight covered with a rag
They could barely see two feet in front
Rifles cocked, with a fully loaded mag
Then they heard a roar behind them
And they knew there was more than one
But their sailor friend was changing fast
A raging beast; he had become
His size it was enormous
Pointed teeth bit hard and fast
Twenty rounds the men fired off at it
Twenty rounds that would be their last
Back at base the cover up began
It was a landslide that killed these men
So they washed their hands of the whole affair
Wrote them off by the signing of a pen
Then they dropped a nuke on the island
Just like they did so many years before
But deep in the dark cave, something stirred
The silence broken by a terrifying roar
THE END
G J TATE
No Man Friday, Gerald J Tate, Copyright 2010. All rights reserved.
An indeterminate ending, with the roar in the cave. What happened to the sailor to transpose him thus is anyone's guess. Perhaps that needs fleshing out a little.
Gosh Gerry, you got me on the edge. Definitely riveting story. You are truly a very interesting and captivating writer of short story. I enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing.
hmmmm, thats all, no number III, i want more this made my mind whirl, it was so engrossing(is that a word???) and yes, i also was on the edge of my seat...i like the way your mind works, grabs you from the start and keeps you there till the end.
an excellent job,
love and hugs
mary etta
I can really appreciate how difficult it is to tell a story in rhyme. You do it well. I like how you left this open a bit at the end. When I write in series, I find they end themselves. They seem to take over. I agree with Terry about making it a short story. Great writing:)
Sheila
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Enjoyed your exciting story!
Connie
Best wishes,
Sheri
Lin
an excellent job,
love and hugs
mary etta
Sheila
Anna