*Written for Sanil's Challenge at fireside poetry.
The Blending of Lives
Problem: She doesn’t speak, he doesn’t Listen, Is there a solution?
Words to use: Patience, Understand, Listen, Love
Our thoughts are mired in unspoken agony,
We rise on angry mornings and I do not speak,
Veiled thoughts when I look at you,
Wishing you could understand-
Just listen you say,
But I have heard you speak all day,
And I tire of your verbal ranting,
I just want to get away!
I seek peace in the mountains,
Its lonely beauty stilling my raging heart,
The flowing streams still my anger,
And I realize I love you despite your ways-
I have no patience for so much talking,
But I struggle to believe the things you say,
My heart and soul is quiet and shy,
I can’t answer you,
When you are always shouting,
When I return home and see your eyes,
It makes me want to cry,
Your heart is so sad,
And I feel so bad,
And want to tell you:
“Baby, I need you to hear me too!
I am not like you!
Sit quietly dear,
And I will strive to tell you,
The shadows of my heart,
I will stay as you speak,
And hear past the anger in your eyes;
Perhaps we can make this work,
And blend our lives as smoothly,
As the raging ocean that meets,
The forgiving shore…
Crash against me,
And I will give,
Perhaps you will see,
That I too have a will,
And when the wave recedes,
I will be here still…
There is such feeling in this poem, I can't help but sympathize. Your words have opened up the gate that has been put up in many relationships. Thank you for sharing this one.
M.Rose
Reviewed by Vesna Perkovic (Reader)
Reviewed on September 2, 2004
Crash against me,
And I will give,
Perhaps you will see,
That I too have a will,
And when the wave recedes,
I will be here still…
perfect ending..this is sooooo gooood..love it..saved it!
vesna :)
Reviewed by Jane Rodway (Reader)
Reviewed on September 1, 2004
I really enjoyed this because you have shown what it is like to be with someone who is angry and can't express it properly. The thing about anger that most of us forget is that what lies beneath it is sorrow or hurt. The hard part is noticing that while you are in the heat of things, and I find walking is a great way to deal with it. Somehow nature and the peacefulness helps to center me and I can think more clearly. Thanks for this insightful write!
Even when they express sad or turbulent emotions, your writings always transmit me an amazing sense of peace, dear Retta.
Thank you, from the heart. Be well,
Love&Light,
Alexandra*
Retta, you’ve encapsulated very well the emotional upheavals that couples far too often go through, and forget that each other has their own way of dealing with issues which effects the viability of a relationship. Stunning work and an excellent response and entry for the challenge.
This is a great poem! I nominate it to be used as the opening, and closing, text of MARRIAGE 101... Thank you, again, for sharing your talent. - Bill
Reviewed by Kate Clifford (Reader)
Reviewed on August 29, 2004
Wonderful heart/soul touching write! Your poetry is always a joy to read.
Reviewed by Susan Barton (Reader)
Reviewed on August 29, 2004
"I seek peace in the mountains,
Its lonely beauty stilling my raging heart,
The flowing streams still my anger,
And I realize I love you despite your ways- "
Putting it all in perspective, eh?
SueB
Reviewed by Lady Peg (Reader)
Reviewed on August 29, 2004
This is so well done capturing so much and meaning Rein excellent for Sanils challenge....
Crash against me,
And I will give,
Perhaps you will see,
That I too have a will,
And when the wave recedes,
I will be here still…
Retta...superb ending dear friend....BHUWAN!!!
Reviewed by Sanil nath (Reader)
Reviewed on August 29, 2004
This is more beautiful and excellent write ... I loved this write and appreciate your talents ... I am so happy you posted this for the challenge. Thanks and thanks a lot ....
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M.Rose
And I will give,
Perhaps you will see,
That I too have a will,
And when the wave recedes,
I will be here still…
perfect ending..this is sooooo gooood..love it..saved it!
vesna :)
Another excellent piece from a poetess so unique - brillant write!!
Robert
Thank you, from the heart. Be well,
Love&Light,
Alexandra*
TRASK
Excellent so well written it's great to have such patience and understanding.
There comes a time though when one goes beyond the caring, and listening, And when the wave recedes, I am no longer there...
Well written from the heart.
Warm hugs
Elga
this is magnificent, emotive poetry--challenge offered, challenge met and surpassed--a winner, in my eyes *good luck in the contest* BRAVA!
(((HUGS))) and love, karla.
enjoed very much
Well Penned
William ....Peace & Love
Its lonely beauty stilling my raging heart,
The flowing streams still my anger,
And I realize I love you despite your ways- "
Putting it all in perspective, eh?
SueB
YOu have such incredible word knowledge!the
metaphor is stunning! Brava!
And I will give,
Perhaps you will see,
That I too have a will,
And when the wave recedes,
I will be here still…
Retta...superb ending dear friend....BHUWAN!!!
Wish you all happiness ....
You have penned this poem so well.
Sandie May Angel
Best wishes always
from
kay
You do this so well Retta...
Peter
Love Tinka