Ok, ever since I read Jerry's Zejel poem I've been dying to do one myself, so I sat down and wrote one today. :) It went on kind of long, but I really enjoyed the process and the rhyming. Thanks for showing us so many different styles Jerry.
the drips they echo in this hole overflowing their ceramic bowl flooding the ground in a new role
your smile unseemingly wry haloed by the darkened sky sending out your words like lye burning scars deep in my soul
you left me here to die with naught grasping at every random thought wishing now that I had fought so that I may have ended hail and whole
growing weary in this endless night knowing now you are but a blight indulging in your own respite lounging time away upon the knoll
brush away the salty tear tamping down distended fear hoping that my eyes might clear that I may finish this tattered scroll
wonder now where it went astray giving in to my own dismay realizing that pain is your forte confinement finally takes its hefty toll
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Reviewed by Amira van Kerk (Reader)
Reviewed on April 18, 2006
Unfortunately I don't know this guy (should I???), but I really love that poem of yours.
Good write.
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Amira
An excellent, thought provoking write; very well penned. BRAVA!
(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.
Reviewed by Jerry Bolton (Reader)
Reviewed on April 1, 2006
THIS is great! You sure as heck put it all together and come up with one dynamite zejel. You kept the premise all the way through the poem, didn't wander over here, stop and stare over there, this was very good. Thanks for giving it a shot. Bet it won't be the last one that you do.
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Good write.
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Amira
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An excellent, thought provoking write; very well penned. BRAVA!
(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.