Come join me. We'll put the top down and drive down Mourning Blvd towards
Oblivion.
You can undo your hair and let the wind comb and uncomb it from the top, down
(t a n g l e . . . u n t a n g l e. r a v e l . . . u n r a v e l.)
until it pulls so hard the roots hurt and you can let your cares s l i p through the loose roots until they escape out of your head and we'll leave them in our wake.
We'll pass your work. (you can leave one there) We'll pass the bank. (leave another there) We'll pass the cemetery.
Keep that one.
Put it in your pocket for later and we'll drive through the foothills to the top of that hill behind the hospital and we'll watch the freeway shoot out of the top of the hospital spilling its carnage of lights and traffic and worries and death for miles southward. And we'll look at things from the
top down
to make them seem smaller. And we won't say a word -- we'll just let Thom Yorke tell us How To Disappear Completely.
We're not here. This isn't happening.
Then I'll lend you my shoulder and my heart and we'll be just us.
There is something very intimate that remains symbolic in this poem. I would even say that part of the imagery is very surreal.
Feelings come out of somewhere and not so innocently.
They're made of love and death, worries and a world turned upside down... until we all disappear one day, don't we?
I don't know about the "song aspect", I read this as a poem.
Until next time,
Axilea
Reviewed by l West (Reader)
Reviewed on November 8, 2007
I love this. I can feel it. I agree with Charlie. You need to check around for a musician, do you know any? Linda
I love this poem. I think it would also make great lyrics set to music with a little refrain. It would not harm this poem one iota to have the title repeated at the bottom either. I know the song you mentioned too...
The whole piece has great atmosphere.
Keep writing
Char
Ho ho ho. Being Christmas and all, I thought I'd stop by, ;) Your poem makes me happy. Makes my jiggle quiver from top down. And as I'm now a Kringle, that says a lot. Keep them coming...I'll expect a lot of 'em next Christmas when I come back, or no presents for you! Mho ho ho!
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Feelings come out of somewhere and not so innocently.
They're made of love and death, worries and a world turned upside down... until we all disappear one day, don't we?
I don't know about the "song aspect", I read this as a poem.
Until next time,
Axilea
The whole piece has great atmosphere.
Keep writing
Char
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