Woman I can't trust you anymore,
you've spooked me beyond words.
It's obvious your heart's at war,
balancing on a hair-raising cord.
You tell me you'll do something,
next time you just don't know.
One more time and then you ping,
declaring a cause you once bemoaned.
What goes on in your twisted head?
One minute you calmly state your path—
the next, you bash me with words of lead.
When I support your old way, you lash.
The utter embarrassment you have caused me
may scarcely be framed in spoken word.
The utter shame I hold, you can't see—
it tares me apart, inward and awkwardly.
Thanks,
Emilie
(A few thoughts? Perhaps you could simply eliminate "woman" at the beginning. It might lend some ambiguity to the message. Also, you might want to replace "tare" with "tear".)
Good presentation!
Tami
Powerful write J!!
Love Tinka