I ventured into serious writing with the poetry genre in my early youth. I have not published/posted a new full-length poem in over a quarter of a century, with the exception of short stanzas utilized for each chapter of my novels. I am nervous about posting this. It has been so long and want your honest and hopefully somewhat kind response. The inspiration from so long ago, does not come as easily (I once could whip out a complete poem in 10 minutes). The inspiration is still intact...it just takes longer. I am not that old but I may be getting a bit more "picky". Who knows? Thanks to my wonderful second family..."The Author's Den".
Time and heaven allows the gifts we are given
The precious reasons for our living
A parent’s love, sometimes taken for granted
Sibling feuds tear like fragile linen
These fighting hearts that sing the same song chanted
What a pain in the ass you are to be so firmly planted
In this family
The years fly like broken hours across the eternal sky
And at 21 your father dies
Then another 11 years pass you by
And your older sister says goodbye
Time has no memory or function
Because sister number one also did not stay
And this has left you at a junction
Now only your mother is here to play out
The stolen moments of each transitory day
Then suddenly she slips away
Now the perpetual clock has stopped without a sigh
WITH VERY GOOD IMAGERY AND PHRASES, YOUR FEELINGS ARE WELL EXPRESSED IN THIS WORK WHICH DEPICTS ONE LAMENTING THE FACT THAT ONLY MEMORIES REMAIN SINCE THE SIMULTAENOUS LOSS OF CLOSE FAMILY MEMBERS. WELL DONE AND THANKS FOR SHARING. GOD BLESS. JOYCE
That was absolutely fabulous and heartwrenching. It's true, you think time lasts forever, than suddenly everyone in life is gone. This is a true and honest write. (and no, you shouldn't have been nervous)
Linda,
You hit the nail on the head. This little ode is not a "pity party" but the futility of those who try to control "fate". Some enjoy very long term life relationships, others are cut short. This is a very personal poem for me. The idea just hit me out of the blue and I began to write about one of the many aspects of my life, albeit, a sad one. Thanks for your encouragement!
Terry
Reviewed by Linda Torrence (Reader)
Reviewed on January 7, 2009
Terry, This was a very moving poem about life. You definitely still have the ability to put out very good poems, that actually have more depth to them. We all learn about life as we are subjected to the things that we neither ask for, nor want! By going through those trials we are able to put into words what we feel from the depth of our soul and you have shown this in the poem that you just wrote. Great job, you haven't lost it, it's just gotten better. So, keep them coming and pretty soon there will be enough for your next book of poetry!
Linda
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That was absolutely fabulous and heartwrenching. It's true, you think time lasts forever, than suddenly everyone in life is gone. This is a true and honest write. (and no, you shouldn't have been nervous)
Mary
You hit the nail on the head. This little ode is not a "pity party" but the futility of those who try to control "fate". Some enjoy very long term life relationships, others are cut short. This is a very personal poem for me. The idea just hit me out of the blue and I began to write about one of the many aspects of my life, albeit, a sad one. Thanks for your encouragement!
Terry
Linda