Since I cannot post a segment from "Falon Rising", due to it being a work in progress; the best I can do is post another poetic chapter header. Thanks to all who responded.
Very emotional poem. And one people can relate to.
I read the last two lines and noticed that the last line is in the past tense while the one before it is in the present tense. I'm tempted to change the last line to present tense. Otherwise it sounds off.
The poem is beautiful, and I'm still anticipating your new book! The hurt and anger show through so well. Fantastic write.
Mary
Reviewed by Linda Torrence (Reader)
Reviewed on October 31, 2009
Excellent, Terry, as usual. I can't wait to read this book and this poetic chapter header, makes me want to "dive" into it right away. The header just sort of teases you as to what is inside!
Linda T.
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I read the last two lines and noticed that the last line is in the past tense while the one before it is in the present tense. I'm tempted to change the last line to present tense. Otherwise it sounds off.
Thanks for sharing and keep on writing.
Lena
The poem is beautiful, and I'm still anticipating your new book! The hurt and anger show through so well. Fantastic write.
Mary
Linda T.