I lie by the river, stretching my arms
to the eternity, in search of you
with the stars in my eyes, weaving
the moonlight in my soul with joy.
Love, O my love, come to me,
come in my arms, and lay down
your dreams in the valley of
my shoulder, where the heart
ripens and the bird of love sings
the song of the lover’s unity.
‘Come, my darling!’ utter not
a word. Close your eyes, and
lower your lips over mine.
Drown me in the pool of ambrosia
and let me moan with the infinite,
beneath the heavens virgin core.
Tomorrow, I hope to wake up
with the dews of your breathe
all over my face, and read
the morning paper in your eyes.
First four lines. The last four lines.
VERY VERY VERY VERY powerful!
The rest in between is a testament to the good stuff nestled between the beginning and the end. Altogether, your original style just rocks the daylights out of this page!
blessin's Bhuwan,
cynth'ya lewis reed
Reviewed by Kate Clifford (Reader)
Reviewed on December 9, 2004
This is one of the most refreshing romantic writes I have read. You have done extremely well with this one.
An exquisite, soft sensual write, Bhuwan. I am so glad that I found where you were posting, I so enjoyed your poetry on LPC, now I can enjoy your work again.
A love to be lost in, Bhuwan! You final line is such a contrast in terms of concept and language, but fits just right and speaks volumes! The visual is stunning and is a perfect compliment to your beautiful sentiments. "Lay down your dreams in the valley of my shoulder" and "let me moan with the infinite, beneath the heavens virgin core" has such a sense of deep passion, loving care and tenderness. You epitomise the heart of the self-giving, wholly yielded lover. Melting, thank you. Kate xx
Quite an interesting pic ... your sharpened quill pen has entertained us once again with a resounding, superlative poem ... greatly enjoyed this write!!
Oh, this is so beautiful, Bhuwan. Such a lovely romance you have penned. There is a soft and gentle reverence, cast in your verses, that made me sigh a sweet sigh. Very, very nice!
Take care,
Sherry
Who could refuse such beauty and love? This is so wonderfully romantic, such grace and in every word, written from a passionate heart, she must be truly special :) Inspiring Bhuwan, keep penning your golden beauties. Enjoyed this tremendously. Take care, and be well.
warm hugs
Elga
Reviewed by Tracey L. O' Very (Reader)
Reviewed on December 5, 2004
read the morning paper in your eyes. Ahhh This is such a roantic poem.
I Love It.
God Bless You and Your Family
Tracey
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William ....peace & Love
VERY VERY VERY VERY powerful!
The rest in between is a testament to the good stuff nestled between the beginning and the end. Altogether, your original style just rocks the daylights out of this page!
blessin's Bhuwan,
cynth'ya lewis reed
Carole
Reindeer
Quite an interesting pic ... your sharpened quill pen has entertained us once again with a resounding, superlative poem ... greatly enjoyed this write!!
Best wishes,
Robert
"lay down
your dreams in the valley of
my shoulder"
Exquisite...
Sandie May Angel :o)
Take care,
Sherry
Who could refuse such beauty and love? This is so wonderfully romantic, such grace and in every word, written from a passionate heart, she must be truly special :) Inspiring Bhuwan, keep penning your golden beauties. Enjoyed this tremendously. Take care, and be well.
warm hugs
Elga
I Love It.
God Bless You and Your Family
Tracey
Your poetry always was excellent...now, in this romantic vein, it still is.
much happiness to you!
Gina
Love & Peace