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A Fool Such As I
by Crystal-Rain Love → (All Poetry by Crystal-Rain Love)
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A FOOL SUCH AS I I never thought you’d make me cry Never thought you’d gut me this way A fool such as I I once knew better I built a wall , a fortress no one could conquer I knew what it was to be hurt and wasn’t revisiting that place again You came calling Weakened me with words I wanted to hear A smile that seized my heart Laughter that wrapped around my soul Slowly, a brick unwedged They all fell down One by one, then faster, faster, as you stayed. I fell down Fell right on my sword Dropped it and left myself vulnerable Wide open for you A fool such as I Should have known better Thought I’d learned my lesson before There’s always one who loves and one who is loved Swore I’d never again be the one to give it all away and get nothing in return A fool such as I Did what I knew better than to do Allowed myself to believe in you Believe you wanted me too Believed I was good enough for you The bricks all fell down My wall crumbled and you walked right in Reached right inside… Took what was left of my heart and left my guts on the floor Over before it began Didn’t even have a chance Just the promise of happiness out of reach Promised to me but I never got to touch A fool such as I I should have known better than to believe A fool such as I Really should know better Yet I still wait for you Still hope for… you. copyright 2010 Crystal-Rain Love

Reviewed by Shirley Houston

Reviewed on May 13, 2012

This made my eyes tear up! I'm so there right now.

Reviewed by Handsum Hart

Reviewed on November 7, 2010

The brick walls always crumble, at the thought of love.
Nice work

Best wishes

Reviewed by stan nassano

Reviewed on October 12, 2010

feel the pain,anger,confusion brought out in these lines...some of I think are just doomed to this fate..hopefully temporary,and not a lasting condition. Nicely done.

Reviewed by Felix Perry

Reviewed on October 11, 2010

Few of us get through this world unscathed by love's keen edged blade but if we discount the pain of the bad loves...how will we ever taste the sweetness of a good one.
fee

Reviewed by Andy Turner

Reviewed on October 10, 2010

(Andy faints)
Blimey, how magical it is to see/hear/feel you writing once more.

Hate to say, not Crystal on her top form, but still a great poem, it is more song like than poetry. no-matter just fab to see your crazy name writing once more.

Tops, doubt if it's autobio, no bloke is that daft.

Reviewed by Crystal-Rain Love

Christine... I actually wrote this after listening to 30 Seconds To Mars's "Was It Just A Dream" and it goes perfectly with the melody. I kind of did write it as a song and when I read it, I hear it that way. Wish I could sing. I'd record it.

Reviewed by Regis Auffray

The theme that you express via your verses here is sadly a timeless and universal one in this world/life, Rain. This meaningful metaphorical offering from you reaches deeply into my soul and your words echo there because I am very familiar with what they express. Thank you. Love, peace, and hugs to you,

Regis (Reegie, to you)

PS: Oh, and I have been a fool too.

Reviewed by The Poetess

"Like a moth to a flame" as madonna sang. This is a beautiful poem. But don't beat yourself up for falling again. Sometimes we need to learn a lesson more than once, in order to fully get it.

I did the same thing. . .more than twice
And am happy to be now stepping around the thin ice.

You will too.

Reviewed by Christine Alwin

..this could be a song...but 'No Fool', how is one to really know, I have learned this a few time..great write (love your bio photo)
Christine

Reviewed by pat medlin

oh my...painful volumes spoken here...as george said...heart wrenching

Reviewed by George Carroll

There are guys and gals out there that are along only for the ride and when its over, goodbye. Heart wrenching poem.

George