She got lost in the forest of delights as morning sun warms shining bright she's tired of trying to find the tree all of them look like they have gold leaves she climbed so many she aches all over decides to take a rest in the clover
Wondering, why did she ever start this the legend calls it the way to find bliss shes being told she can't take a break only have so many hours to make it sorry but she's been out here all day looking for a leaf made of gold, they say
She was all excited, pumped,at the start now feeling kind of brokenhearted thought sure she'd find the leaf by now just have to touch it and the person she loves will return her love forever sounds crazy, but worth the endeavor
She sees a gorgeous blue bird with red breast whistling so beautifully she's entranced it seems stange the leaf next to him looks gold suddenly the suns rays make it glisten she starts climbing the tree like a monkey not caring that she's bloody and sore
Losing traction, so tired her arms like lead have to keep going, she sees it is the gold leaf shining on a branch right next to the sweet bird she prays for strength being in arms reach please help, one last heave and she's there stretching she touches the leaf, its hard like a coin
Before she takes her hand away gets bit by a snake it didn't hurt just a sting, so shocked she screams decending the tree so quickly out of breath she falls on the ground gasping for air, fighting fear she sees only a slim green garden snake, shes relieved euphoric that she touched the leaf, she dies smiling
Wow! This sure puts a thought on one's mind....it seems she spent most of her life searching for what she thought would make her happy, and what did she endure a small amount of pleasure for just a season...then death. Almost like many are living their lives today...just for the day and seeking for pleasure, but in the end...well we all know how that story goes. Wonderful write, very creative and imaginative....
Blessings,
Joyce Bowling
Reviewed by Andy Turner (Reader)
Reviewed on October 8, 2006
HOW CAN YOU BE SO CRUEL!!!!
great poetic/story
Reviewed by Victor Buhagiar (Reader)
Reviewed on October 7, 2006
Poor girl. I love happy ending. But I suppose you can't have everything in this world. At least I had a very imaginative poem. Victor
A sad ending indeed. Searching for something she thought she wanted and it ended up killing her. This could easily be a universal proverb for chasing the bloody brass ring in this life. You just never know.
It's wise to be satisfied with where we're at, and with what we have. I still haven't learned this lesson completely. i still strive for things!
A great poem/story
Richard Lloyd Cederberg
Reviewed by Dove JoAnne Cromp (Reader)
Reviewed on October 7, 2006
GLORIOUS!!! Kinda reminds me of Jude's poem tonight--
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I like the imagery here, many layered thoughts
:)Ch'erie
Why am I thinking of The Golden Bough?
Ron
Love Tinka
Blessings,
Joyce Bowling
great poetic/story
Love,
CJ
once we find what we're searching for, the end of the journey just begins ...
interesting, creative and unique poem ...
Susan
Peace,
Joselyn
This reads as flash fiction almost.
A sad ending indeed. Searching for something she thought she wanted and it ended up killing her. This could easily be a universal proverb for chasing the bloody brass ring in this life. You just never know.
It's wise to be satisfied with where we're at, and with what we have. I still haven't learned this lesson completely. i still strive for things!
A great poem/story
Richard Lloyd Cederberg
Love,
Dove
I wanted a happy ending
what a twist at the end........totally unexpected ET
ahhhh
lol
good one pax A