hello...........is anyone there?
a breeze run pass me
'laughs in the air
didn't realize how dark it was in here
days turned into weeks
and I walk endlessly through my sleep
I should be tired and weak.......but I'm starting to care
and I didn't realize how dark it is in here
I thought I knew all my heart
I thought I was me from the start
but colors change and fall deep
mixing in with the words I speak
I love you.....I know that now
pride held the truth
insecrity smashed it down
loyalty to me............. ran out my ears
when silence smacked my face
and brought out my fears
I didn't know how dark it has been in here
for years...
I walked away from you with a grace
that told you I was never in that place.....of love
but I walked blind....cause of all those times
I had been hurt.......
hello....are you still here?
Or did you leave me with the fallin of your
tears.......
I see you I think
and my insides get soft and wet
my hands feel your silhouette
your back is turned.....and your silence burns
a hole straight through me
and I yearn......for your breath
I swear .....I didn't realize how dark it was in here
*but the mirror never lies.......
cause it don't hide the eyes*
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Reviews of "DarkChild"
Reviewed by Anna Marie Fritz (Reader)
Reviewed on February 12, 2007
Ooooohhh, girl.
This goes down like warm molasses on fresh-baked corncakes.
The last few lines, especially, hit me with solid images that
I felt I could almost put on canvas! You rock with this one, that's
for sure.
Powerful and moving poem!
Great writing!
...
but colors change and fall deep
mixing in with the words I speak
...
I see you I think
and my insides get soft and wet
my hands feel your silhouette
your back is turned.....and your silence burns
a hole straight through me
Reviewed by RON P KING
Reviewed on September 9, 2002
so moving feeling funny on the inside keep it up you got me sold.
Reviewed by Jim Smith (Reader)
Reviewed on September 4, 2002
I like the ode, though, I don't see it as all bad for the narrator. I like things dark, everything looks better, doesn't it?
Reviewed by Drkman (Reader)
Reviewed on September 4, 2002
Mitzi
This a great powerful write. It has a wonderful dark feel> I hung on the words. You have agreat talent. Makes me wanna write something... if only I had words left.
Drkman
Reviewed by Kate Clifford (Reader)
Reviewed on September 3, 2002
This was a well written, powerful emotional write. Great work!
Give her a big hug from me and tell her always that you love her,that will turn her light on and that is all she has ever wanted,hug that little girl in you,she is still there.I absolutely adored this poem.
i have to saythis was great. your words are so captivating. really nice i had to come and check your work out. i heard you were great and that is no lie!
So potent and oh so true. The insecurities of the heart can hinder you from allowing the love of a lifetime in....if you let it.
Great poem!!!! ;) Silver
PS...I am, sadly, not a composer. I will try to find someone to compose the music for my poem "Wasted Time" tho. Thank you for your compliments to it. ;) Silver
Reviewed by Russ Okamura (Reader)
Reviewed on September 2, 2002
A very passionate prose, honest and creative expression. Truly artistic.
Reviewed by Sanil nath (Reader)
Reviewed on September 1, 2002
Wonderful my dear friend .... so sweet ... Keep it up
Reviewed by Mark Mahoney (Reader)
Reviewed on September 1, 2002
what a truly great write,... well done here...take care...Mark...
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This goes down like warm molasses on fresh-baked corncakes.
The last few lines, especially, hit me with solid images that
I felt I could almost put on canvas! You rock with this one, that's
for sure.
Great writing!
...
but colors change and fall deep
mixing in with the words I speak
...
I see you I think
and my insides get soft and wet
my hands feel your silhouette
your back is turned.....and your silence burns
a hole straight through me
This a great powerful write. It has a wonderful dark feel> I hung on the words. You have agreat talent. Makes me wanna write something... if only I had words left.
Drkman
Great poem!!!! ;) Silver
PS...I am, sadly, not a composer. I will try to find someone to compose the music for my poem "Wasted Time" tho. Thank you for your compliments to it. ;) Silver
Brilliant write sweety! a captured moment, thanks for sharing. Nice to read your work again.
Hugs, Gregg
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