An inspirational poem of peace and meditative stature
You are alone on a deserted island that has been filled with overgrown fruit
and bare essentials. The water is so clear you can use it as an honest mirror
of truth. Over in the distance you spot a lovely hammock that has been hung
between two sturdy cypress trees. You decide to walk over and give it a try.(b)
Its soft material hugs you and before you know it, you are fast asleep in that
lovely makeshift hammock. The sound of the ocean rocks your ears in tranquil
motion to and fro. (b)
Passing clouds glide over your head without making a sound. They are watching
you breathe as they go by. Breathe from your diaphragm, your chest, your throat,
Breathe in and out.
You smile cuz you are in a place of inner contentment. A little green turtle trundles
along moving side by side close in , circling your little soft hammock.
She is heading for the ocean for some seaweed, jellies or tunicates. The little rosy
seashells are sitting at the edge. They call you over for a barefoot walk. You smile
as you rise and go to the edge of the water wetting your feet and holding spaced
with the dolphins and the fish (b)
You are going to live here for a little while. Long enough to receive your fitful rest
You are going to stay her for a little while, cuz you know it is the best place to be(b)
Quite an idealistic vision of where to be. I have been watching people dropped off in idyllic settings like this only to find that they are attacked mercilessly by insects, find freshwater very difficult to come by, and starve from the inability to catch food both in the ocean and on the shore.
I enjoyed this, but I would have enjoyed it much more if you had written it in true poetical style. You are, of course free to write in whatever style you like. Still, I would enjoy it much better if you wrote it in true poetical style.
I'm certain anyone would love to spend time in this place you've envisioned. The creatures you've chosen are effective and symbolic. The turtle is a symbol of endurance and persistence in many cultures. And Dolphins (my favorite creature on God's Earth) are friendly, kind, harmless, intelligent, sensitive, focused, and very strong; these are excellent things to embrace as the heart is healing. An effective piece of poetiprose flash-fiction, Vienna. Peace... r
These timeless quotations culled from the celebrated corpus of writings by W.E.B. Du Bois are presented with illuminating introductory essays by Aberjhani. Narration of the Audible book performed by Catherine Byers.
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