And so it was, that you said something like
hello, and there was this and there was that
and everyone thought that I was me, but you.
And there was that and there was this,
and so it was that you said something like
goodbye and you left, and everyone thought
that that was that, but you.
And so it goes that there is this and there is that
and everyone thinks that I am still here, but you.
And so it is, that somewhere we sit together
and talk of this and that and look back to where
we are not, though people think we still are,
and no-one knows what the hell I’m on about
but you.
A variation on Billy Collins' paradelle perhaps? Not sure, but I like the spiraling in and out of sense and nonsense. Greatly enjoyed the poem as a whole.
Aberjhani
Now this was cool, Kate...I loved the repetition and the twist and the flirtatiousness...banter...almost like two birds in nature doing a dance as they check each other out coyly or is it confidence peeking over the shoulder in retort. And in the end, i's as though those old love birds share a couch and quiet moments in the knowledge and understanding of each other, but flirting, and pecking, and smiling with their eyes a spark...still.
Love,
Taylor
I feel the madness of a lost love in these lines of logic...
I can hear the muse of thought in the this and that, there among the thinks of them and those...
Very Well done!
Love and Peace~
Kimmy~
I loved it Kate though fascinating piece and so mysterious. I think you did a wonderful JOB. reminded me of DR Suess in away a delight to read your creativity in this one. XXX Joselyn
Reviewed by Andy Turner (Reader)
Reviewed on February 18, 2007
Nope makes perfect sense to me, but then so does Becket..
Reminded me somehow of a uni Professor. He had the habit of looking at the wall - or occasionally out the window - when speaking directly to you. Better still, a clue to unravelling the familiar from this almost proverbial bass line is understanding 'yesterday was tomorrow, and tomorrow, today will be yesterday.' Oh I just love it!
Only those closest to us know us inside out - in fact my wife and I often come out the back of each other.
Your word game leads the reader into imagining the unimaginable. For me, it describes well the times when only the two that matter can rightly interpret the situation. It's fun to read, and more fun not to know its real meaning. (They said I ws the strange one, of course.) Fp zo mrrf lrr[rt?
- Bill
A graceful reminiscence, Quoi enriches the relationship with mutual respect and tenderness, dialogue between two interacting people. The comparison is a good one regarding a course of events that only those who know, KNOW. All is paradoxical when we speak of passion. Passion thrives on obstacles. Passion inspires a woman to die for the image of the beloved, whom she is not even certain she would love if she had to share her actual life. Sentimental piece of writing, Kate...
From the Isle of Lesbos, Charlotte was lesbian and refused to bend to society's rules...
I may not know what that or this is but do know an origianal work that I like when I read it and this is definately one of them. You skillfully blend what is possible and what is clearly unclear into somthing the reader can correspond with his own life. I think this is unique from your usual style and yet because of it's u niqueness it is also similiar. Big hand clap and bigger hug going out to you sweet Kate.
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Aberjhani
Love,
Taylor
about if that could be possible lol
Makes sense to me Kate and hell I looked
back to where I wasn't and I was not
HELP....I am lost!!
Love Tinka
(((HUGS))) and much love, your friend in America, Karen Lynn in Texas. :D
I'm not Billy, but I got it: love it!! And you. :)
(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.
I can hear the muse of thought in the this and that, there among the thinks of them and those...
Very Well done!
Love and Peace~
Kimmy~
Thanks for sharing.
Régis (Reg)
I feel Dr. Suess stalking here...lol
WArmly, WArrior Sheeeooxx
Blessings,
Joyce Bowling
Only those closest to us know us inside out - in fact my wife and I often come out the back of each other.
Nifty, teaser of a write.
Dai
- Bill
I'm keeping this poem.
Love,
Susan
From the Isle of Lesbos, Charlotte was lesbian and refused to bend to society's rules...
Sage
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