Dayumm... I'm feeling good! :)) Am almost up to my correct tally of poems for the Month Of Poetry challenge: 16 out of 17 days! Be glad you have been spared most of them, though! K xx
THE FASTENING
Like hooks and eyes
we’re small, fiddly;
barely managing to
find each other,
let alone meet.
But our soft buttons
have been pressed;
like with those silk-covered
pearls on a wedding night,
our heat-swollen fingers
fumble, shape-feeling the dark.
And too tight these loops
of restraint: we can never
slip them over or off too easily.
The thread of me catches
on the barb of your smile
as with precision you eye
the fine point of my needle.
No sticky, quick-fix
fluff-collecting velcro
attachment is this;
Electric, these mundane thoughts almost sizzle to life. I don't know why but it makes me think about going out and smelling the roses I meant to ignore today.
Well, I must say I don't think I will ever think of zippers in quite the same way! hee, hee...
But with all that plastic coating they put on the teeth nowadays, do zippers still rust? For this poem's sake, I hope so. :~)
So uniquely you... Love it!
Cryssa :~)
Wow I love ...we’re zipped ‘til our teeth
rust together
Beautifully expressed
Excellent creative write!!!
Brilliant Piece!!
Peace Love And Hugssss....Morning Star
Splediforous relationship poem... I love the analogies here... I like each strophe for a different reason. 5, 6 and the last are my very favorites... perfect ending too-- visual, but something more than that... it contains such a powerful resolution, that the reader cannot help but feel that-- up to his chin... --Charlie
I like this one Kate, the balance of velcro on one side against the zipper on the other is like a casual affair only to satisfy desire compared to the quality and strength of love that is meant to last forever. Well done my dear friend. enjoyed this one.
hugs
Pops
Me Gawd, Girl, you've gone daft! And, to think, you remember every blasted move to move, and finally surrender! What lengths you do take in poetry telling your tales... and this is dayum goodun' Your mind and the US Government; dysfunctional but effective! Great writing, too!
- Bill
If this isn't an award winning gem,I don't know what would be! I love your sense of humor Kate!;-)Unique and delightful!ET
Reviewed by Jerry Bolton (Reader)
Reviewed on April 17, 2008
You are an insane female-type person . . . I'd love to sit down and have a few with ya . . . I love your take on just about everything . . . Even silly stuff . . . Uh huh, like this . . . Love it I tell you . . .
Homer's Ill Iliad & Odd Sea Odyssey (420 pages) is an adult satire/parody rewrite of the classic stories of the 10 year Trojan War and of the 10 year adventure of Odysseus trying to return home to his native Ithaca.
The imagery is astounding!
Got me thinkin'
Write On!
Warmest Blessings and Inner Peace, Warrior Purple PaSsion Shexooo
Stay Positive!
Axilea
Cheers and love ~~ Micke
Be always safe,
Karen
But with all that plastic coating they put on the teeth nowadays, do zippers still rust? For this poem's sake, I hope so. :~)
So uniquely you... Love it!
Cryssa :~)
and a big awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww
love it!!! so creative........got frosting??? :) pax A
on the barb of your smile
as with precision you eye
the fine point of my needle." This my friend is beautiful!
Everything would be so much easier if it were a velcro world. (lol)
Good one. Excellent metaphors. Peace, Love and Blessings Always, Paul.
rust together
Beautifully expressed
Excellent creative write!!!
Brilliant Piece!!
Peace Love And Hugssss....Morning Star
Blessings and love,
Susan
Much love,
Bill :-)
hugs
Pops
- Bill
Oooohhhhhhh - s u b l i m e, to be meshed this close!!!!!
(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.
(((HUGS))) and much love, your friend in America, Karen Lynn. :D