... I have a hunch I was born in the wrong era! :)) I had an evening-in with The Tudors last night and, after seeing something of all the shenanigans they got up to, it makes Halloween look rather tame...!! xx
FLESH AND BONE
Oh, to do away with flesh
that I might slip through walls
and be air that inhabits a lover’s
close-space,
a lover’s
closed-space:
the live-wired
circus-try of his mind,
the vacuum-packed,
prime-pumped pipe-work
of his arteries!
No, not merely air,
but, rather, bone;
rattling and clanking my
ball-and-chained emotions
down endless unlit corridors,
entering into sunless rooms
of his mad-inhabited dreams
with screams, teasing the hair
on his lover’s chest to attention.
But let Lover clothed in flesh remain,
that wet-pink of his juice-stained lips
might count each fragile knuckle
of my downwards curling spine,
search every polished curve
and dew-beaded hollow of my
weightless, trembling frame for
pulses still warm and fast beating.
Oh, I'm a big fan of The Tudors. I just discovered the show a few weeks ago, so I bought the series. I'm in the middle of season two. I also think I was born in the wrong era...lol. I love your descriptions in this poem. One that sticks out is the curling spine. For me, that imagery jumps off the screen and reminds me of several scenes in the series. King Henry VIII seems to want to devour his women at times. Hugs,
Sheila
Reviewed by Gianetta Ellis (Reader)
Reviewed on November 7, 2009
Where oh where have I been? Somewhere else when I should've been here. It seems in my time away you have graced the page with another masterpiece. This is truly remarkable writing dear Kate. What more could I add than what the others have already said except to say that I wish I'd written this! I sooo relate to the concept underlying this piece. My thoughts have run this path, but not nearly so eloquently.
Wow! Katie!!!
This Poem Rocks from early morn to High noon! I am enthralled with your mind!!! And Word-usage! You explore deeply in creative ways and it shows! As this floats in the air, is does so IN MY HEART!
Stay Safe and Happy!
WRITE ON!POETESS!
This seems to have a mind of its own... it rather floats along on its own air and then slides down that polished curve of a banister and ends...wavering in the air of its own fruition...
As Dawn wrote, your creativity with words is remarkable. I'm particularly receptive to the rhythm and energy and concision of the second and third stanzas.
I was thinking that it could be interesting to choose another century and... live there for a while, but then, who would you choose to be?
I guess that this "detail" is quite essential! ;)
yes, this is the creative Kate Burnside - imagination in full bloom and verbiage at warp speed to please and tease the reader with perceptions new -- you have done this thing quite well Kate -- share with us as often as your pen and mind strike a deal -- while your "trembling frame pulses still warm and fast beating" -- peace and love my friend -- Jon Michael
scenting not merely arterial tides but inhabiting the circumference of this BIG-TOP () this is way DOWN_UNDER the fragility of weightlessness ~)pulsing(~ Ted
Kate,
This pulses and runs an electric current through the reader; superb word choice and combinations..."vacuum-packed, prime-pumped pipe-work..."..."...wet-pink...juice-stained..."
this heats up from first line to a raging fire at that last few and I felt the curves of the spine and the heat of the skin in your descriptive narration...loved it..
Rich sumptuous Tudor Dynasty era fascinates me whenever I read or see anything about it. How can it not with a King like Henry VIII? Talk about the dark side...;-)Incredible poem,Kate,
the way you use words is a gift to your readers!
Reviewed by Jerry Bolton (Reader)
Reviewed on October 25, 2009
Hah! And the walls do not only tremble, they also talk / The Tudors, et al, could probably even shock this unshockable world of today / And as we speak of ghosts, maybe they will in due time, maybe they will . . . I still haven't quite gotten over Upstairs, Downstairs as far as that goes . . . And then there is Caligula, I have the uncut version . . . Happy shenanigans!!!!
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Sheila
So unique, Kate, awesome pen!
WOW! that's what I call picked to the bone. Always, paul.
This Poem Rocks from early morn to High noon! I am enthralled with your mind!!! And Word-usage! You explore deeply in creative ways and it shows! As this floats in the air, is does so IN MY HEART!
Stay Safe and Happy!
WRITE ON!POETESS!
Blessings!Love and Warm Hugs,SHECAT Purrs...
Exceptional imagery...
Cryssa :~)
I was thinking that it could be interesting to choose another century and... live there for a while, but then, who would you choose to be?
I guess that this "detail" is quite essential! ;)
Axilea
Kate---you rock!
EDvard
Allen
(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.
This pulses and runs an electric current through the reader; superb word choice and combinations..."vacuum-packed, prime-pumped pipe-work..."..."...wet-pink...juice-stained..."
At your best here.
John
Excellent write, Kate.
Carolyn
Fee
the way you use words is a gift to your readers!
Carole~
(((HUGS))) and much love, your friend in America, Karen Lynn in Texas. :D
Regis