Fee, I liked this new work. I to believe that it is refreshing to try and write differently. I have tried many styles, even one poem were I wrote as a man. I think that it is wonderful to beable to open up and do what you feel like when you choose.
hugs
Kathy

I agree this is different for you, Fee. How can we know what we're capable of unless we do open the box? I hear metal music with these lyrics. Maybe it's just my take on it. Edgy! Love and Hugs,
Sheila

This would make great lyrics. I like the different style. Experimenting in life is always a good thing, definately in art :) This is pretty hot, lol. I like the idea of letting go and living for the moment. Michelle

Great write Fee, as sometimes I think we should live outside the box,,, life is but a breath of air,,,, and we sure can't get that time back :)
Christine

Hey Kat My Brotha In Arm'z,

Tiz Gypsy Soul Sista ! ! !
AND Felix
And yes iza know weza nta poss'd 2 use or start a sentence wth AND so...
Evn Thou it know whr near a sentence I Conform jst thiz once Well nt rel jst take'n Tha ! ! !

DNA Felix I Mizz'd YOU lika "THA Feminine MOON" Mizza'z
"Tha Masculine SUN" DNA i just felt & Fell in 2 YOU.

DNA Re:Satan's Track

Ev bod know'z it'z gta be play back WARD"z so Quick...
Kciuq Os Z"Draw
"Y Bab Em REG Gub No Er'we K Cart S'Natas"
DNA I'm wth Nelson & Hiz Mendela "A Saint iza Sinner"

Gta Go KAT My Bro ! ! !
Yibita Yibita tht nt F.#K'n ALL My KIN FOLK'z...


Love'n'Light
Gypsy.xxx


Blessed BE ! ! !
"THA

Agree with everyone; I think this is very strong/good work and I really like the notion of "seeing time pass through the eye of a needle" - what a great concept/metaphor. It is grand to not only step out of the box, but to dance 'round it then topple it and maybe even turn it inside-out...

Excellent dark song...sure some teenageres will go crazy about this as a Hard rock metal thingy!!

Eyes and fingers painted black...dressed in really "satanic" outfits...lol!!

Love Tinka

uhh. Pretty dark stuff from a guy with a heart as big as the moon.
Makes me wonder if I would have liked to have known you in your younger years. (Not that you're old, now. lol)
I like it. You should step out of that box of yours more often.
Love,
Becca

Isn't it amazing to be stepping out of the box. I loved this, keep them coming dear Fee!!!!
Peace, love, and light,
Amber "V"

WOW Sweet Fee, what a song, filled with such sadness and acceptance!
It is VERY important to step out of the box, I say "shake a few tail feathers now and then" but I love your saying too,
to STaY Creative and keep the mind bubbling!
Love this intense poem! Filled with TRUTH!
WRITE-ON!
Warmest Blessings and Inner Peace, Warrior Purple Soulful SHEExooo

STay Positive!

Ladies and Gentlemen! ! ! you have heard the lyrics of the this song, sung for the first time by the "Grateful Death Rock Band" that just now felt out of Fee box.
Mister LeRoy Perry you give me willies!

Georg

Fee, I love this, and I, too, think it's important to "step out of the box," every once in awhile. As writers, I think it's important to experiment with different styles and ideas, and I also think it's important for readers not to take our work personally, as though we are always writing about ourselves and our experiences...it's all about imagination! Excellent work!

You could never fall out and you are always on top with a perfect write. You are right Cuz we all need to step out of that box every now and then and those that don't like that write can move on until something touches them. Thank you for sharing.

Love ya face Cuz XOXOXO, Rose