My First Time (erotic) (poem) by Sandra A. Mushi on AuthorsDen

Reviewed by nichole sevilla (Reader)

Reviewed on December 22, 2008

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Reviewed by Ingrid Khola (Reader)

Reviewed on May 11, 2006

I have a confession to make, you know what it is so why go into details? LOL,LOL,LOL!

Reviewed by P.T. Mayes (Reader)

Reviewed on January 23, 2006

Very good, very imaginative. Sandie, you have a nasty skill of tricking the reader, of making him/her feel little guilty for having imagined so much that wasn't there... and wonder at ourselves.

Reviewed by sany jackson (Reader)

Reviewed on November 1, 2005

HAHA!!! Ididn't suspect that ending.great poem

Reviewed by Masood Lohar

Reviewed on September 12, 2005

very intelligent!

Reviewed by Amira van Kerk (Reader)

Reviewed on August 21, 2005

Hehe... did not expect this ending.
Great write.
Amira

Reviewed by Poetess of The Soul Sheila G

Reviewed on July 28, 2005

You trickery Master of fools-Great imagery- Sandra, Let us have another in that wicked mind of yours,VERy - VERy clever! I am still putting off having a wisdom tooth taken out :( :) WArmly,Sheee

Reviewed by Gwen Dickerson

Reviewed on July 26, 2005

My goodness! You sure had me fooled! Well done, Sandra!

Reviewed by Karla Dorman, The StormSpinner

Reviewed on July 19, 2005

Dang you, Sandie, QUIT FOOLIN ME LIKE THAT! Yep--you got me AGAIN! You are too clever for your own good...or I am dumb as a box of rocks. LOL

GOOD SHOW!!

(((HUGS))) and love, Karla. :)

Reviewed by Paul Williams

Reviewed on July 18, 2005

oooh Sandie you wicked lady, you had me fooled too, superb twist, excellent.

Paul;-)

Reviewed by Richard Christopher Suarez (Reader)

Reviewed on July 18, 2005

Intense has just been re-defined!
You can write your B-tt off.
The ending made my heart pop into my stomach
and I am a man.
severe to the maximum...., but it's contents are a necessary read!
keep on keeping on ......and ever now AND then...
DANCE SISTER'- DON'T LET IT GET YOU DOWN'.
Rich Criso Suarez

Reviewed by Kate Clifford (Reader)

Reviewed on July 18, 2005

LOVE it! Few times am I surprised, and I am surprised with the ending. Thank you :-) Fantastic write!

Reviewed by David Knight

Reviewed on July 18, 2005

Just my sort of ending - unexpected.

I wonder how many dirty minds (like mine :) ) jumped to the wrong conclusion.

David

Reviewed by Andre Bendavi ben-YEHU

Reviewed on July 18, 2005

Excellence in imagery supported by rhythm and contents, make
"The First Time", a first expression of literary strike of
the Major Art, enriching the golden pages of Poetry.

Keep on writing, Poet!

Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU

Reviewed by Mocha Sistah

Reviewed on July 17, 2005

You are clever! I can totally relate. When through that myself but your imagery was so good that I didn't notice until the end of the piece. YOu are very excellent writer. Thanks for sharing.

Reviewed by Dave Harm

Reviewed on July 17, 2005

Very clever, I've got to go to the dentist and get my wisdom teeth pulled, this poem, I'm sure, will bounce in my head...

Reviewed by Mark Rockeymoore

Reviewed on July 17, 2005

alright, sandra. very, very well done, for real. this one had me breathin' short. thank you for that ending! the rest, much too close to too many girls' real 'first' experience. you are definitely a wordsmith of sublime distinction!

Reviewed by Roger Ochs

Reviewed on July 17, 2005

you lead the reader down a Primrose path and then turn him around with a wink and a smile. This is wonderful misdirection.

Reviewed by jude forese

Reviewed on July 17, 2005

very clever poem ... i was fooled to the end ...

Reviewed by Patricia Gomes

Reviewed on July 17, 2005

I'm with Lisa - what a godblessed relief the end was. You got my hackles up, lady; I was all set to go beat up the dentist.

Reviewed by Lisa Hilbers

Reviewed on July 17, 2005

Sandra,
Every muscle in my body was tense, by the time I reached the end, and then you caught me completely off guard! But then I was happy and relieved.
Great work!

Lisa

Reviewed by Mr. Ed

Reviewed on July 17, 2005

A truly delightful ending to this epic experience, Sandra!

Reviewed by OnepoetGem *the Poetic Rapper

Reviewed on July 17, 2005

hello Sandra, this was fun and with a surprising ending, I don't know which would be worse for you, the dentist or a real big, well lets just say "life can be a pain. On your bio, David C, aka kung fu, love that poem, didn't know he was a poet also

Reviewed by George Carroll

Reviewed on July 17, 2005

You catch the reader going in one direction as your words are made into a wonderful ploy and end with a happy surprise. Exceptional write.

Reviewed by Mark Mahoney (Reader)

Reviewed on July 17, 2005

What a very clever well written piece, right to the end then wallop...superb flow and a very well done, thank christ it was only a tooth, take good care...Mark x

Reviewed by Sandie May Joyce (Sandie Angel)

Reviewed on July 16, 2005

Gosh! You had me fooled into thinking that this was a rape of the innocence...until the very end.

A captivating write!

Sandie May Angel a.k.a. Sandie Angel :o)

Reviewed by Nordette Adams

Reviewed on July 16, 2005

Oh, my lord. You've just struck one of my phobias and fooled me too. You're a wicked woman. Mine would be kinkier because the DDS has to tie me down. LOL.

Reviewed by E T Waldron

Reviewed on July 16, 2005

hahaha leave it to you clever sandie! Fantastc analogy, had me fooled!

Eileen

Reviewed by Ronald Hull

Reviewed on July 16, 2005

Bloody good. Scared me a bit.

Ron

Reviewed by Regis Auffray

Reviewed on July 16, 2005

Nice twist, Sandra. Thank you. Love and peace to you. Regis

Reviewed by Tinka Boukes

Reviewed on July 16, 2005

Damn you you had me with this one...it was so intense I thought he raped you!!

Just shows you what goes through someones mind whe in the wrong frame of mind huh?

Love Tinka

Reviewed by Karen Lynn Vidra, The Texas Tornado

Reviewed on July 16, 2005

excellent imagery and emotion, sandie; brava on a fine write! well done!

(((HUGS))) and much love, your friend in america, karen lynn in texas. :D

Reviewed by Jerry Bolton (Reader)

Reviewed on July 16, 2005

You are an evil woman. I had my doubts, but now you have given me proof. Evil is thy name! Loved it Sandra.