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Coming Home
by Axilea MU → (All Poetry by Axilea MU)
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- When memories are no longer in one's mind,
but just beneath the skin. -
(an older piece I found, as I am now writing something about memory.)

When he came home
after years of wandering,
he had a wish
to forget where he had been.

The threshold
of the place he called home,
drew a line
that turned his past
into a scar, a sign.

Nine years were a deep wound
and memory, a device, so useless,
no more, no less.

When he came home,
he didn't sit on his couch,
did not spend a second
in his blue bedroom,
did not even take a look
at his favorite book.

He stepped into the garden,
as if he was drawn
just after the rain,
attracted by the shiny lawn.

A warm piece of metal
was hidden in the thick grass
and he picked it up,
a key made of brass.

He held it for just a moment
that lasted until dawn,
then he opened his tired hand
to let the key slide
forever into his pocket.

When he came home,
he knew he had a key
for a lock that sealed
the scar of memory

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 Reviews of "Coming Home"
Reviewed by Elizabeth Price
Reviewed on February 21, 2008
He came home. Alleluia. Liz

Reviewed by Cryssa C
Reviewed on February 19, 2008
So many parallels can be drawn from this story...
I love how your poetry does that...pulls the reader in, tells a story and then leaves us wandering in our own paths...

Cryssa

Reviewed by E. Farrand (Reader)
Reviewed on February 15, 2008
Top notch, Axilea. It is soothing to read.

Reviewed by Kathy Armijo
Reviewed on February 14, 2008
I remember drawing a picture of a garbage can that had heavy chains wrapped around it and locked so the horrible contents/scars could not be seen. This poem reminds of my shock after I saw what I'd drawn and what it meant to me. Another memory that I'd just as soon forget.

God bless you. Kathy

Reviewed by Michelle Mead
Reviewed on February 14, 2008
You take the common and simple and create emotion and interest for the reader, nicely done.

Reviewed by Walt Hardester
Reviewed on February 14, 2008
As we get older and hopefully wiser, we learn to kill those memories before we bury them deep, still alive. Because if we don't, we shall surely see them again.


Walt

Reviewed by Amor Sabor
Reviewed on February 14, 2008
Always excellence in your lines, Axilea...phenomenol imagery.
Amor

Reviewed by David Hightower
Reviewed on February 13, 2008
Axilea - Melancholy poem - that keeps the reader wondering about the character's past. I like the way you use the physical to express the emotional and spiritual and the way you use rhyme without being a slave to it. I love the imagery in the lines:

The threshold
of the place he called home,
drew a line
that turned his past
into a scar, a sign.
- David

Reviewed by Andy Turner (Reader)
Reviewed on February 12, 2008
Man, your writes are like a screen play of the mind...

To be frank and fair if this was crap I'd say so, in my humble oppinion...But it ain't, it's amazing, and lasting...
kewl talent...

Reviewed by Karen Palumbo
Reviewed on February 12, 2008
You make many thoughts surface in this lovely, heartwarming piece. Coming home, finally came into being and perhaps to stay for good this time....

Be always safe,
Karen

Reviewed on February 12, 2008
Deeply moving, mysterious write - he holds the key to unlocking secrets - well done, Axilea.

(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.

Reviewed by Paul Berube
Reviewed on February 12, 2008
Axilea,

A most perfect write. Really hits close to home. Locking one door is usually the highway to opening many others. Peace, Love and Blessings Always, Paul.

Reviewed by Dawn Anderson
Reviewed on February 12, 2008
This is exceptionally written. I like the imagery and the meaning behind the key...especially liked the last stanza.

Reviewed by Georg Mateos
Reviewed on February 12, 2008
Like a soldier returning home, trying not to remember where he has been, what he as seen and then...what he had felt.
She should have had that key, she should have keeped safe so all the sealed secrets will never be free.
Outstanding write!

Georg

Reviewed by Charlie
Reviewed on February 11, 2008
Fabulous analogy-- the line, the scar, the key, the lock-- this is a poem to pocket and ponder. Wonderful--the deep meaning that can be found in a castaway object.

nit-pick: "as if he [were] drawn" I believe.



Love it. --Charlie

Reviewed by Branch Isole (Reader)
Reviewed on February 11, 2008
all of the elements work well here; in each stanza and then as a whole allowing the reader to come into the story and still have a sense of beginning, middle and now a possible end (while again, a new beginning).

Reviewed by Susan de Vegter
Reviewed on February 11, 2008
This is a mystery in the making and I feel we need another serial to this poem It is the first steps.
Love and blessings!
Susan


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