His plane crashed in the jungle months ago
All that was salvageable was a pad and pen
Carefully placed in his back pocket
So he could still scribble his erratic verse
He lived off fruits, berries
And when lucky a sporadic lizard
He kept moving onward to the horizon
Hoping to find his way out of the jungle maze
One day, he saw smoke rising
And cautiously moved closer
He could see a village
Below the treetops
Along a stream
Men were fishing
And women cooking
Smelled so good
A child noticed him and pointed to the elders
Who ran to him so quickly
He had no chance of escape
They gestured to him “come”
He had to obey
Their spears and arrows were many
To his surprise he was greeted
With smiles and amazement
For they had never seen a man
With a diamond in his ear
And whose face shined like the moon
They danced and celebrated
Around the campfire with song and feast
A night of pure wonder
He took much pleasure from their hospitality
From their splendor and awe
And watched with amazement
How they loved to draw
On animal hide with colors of mud
One day, he witnessed how they bowed and prayed
To an idol carved from a tree trunk
Surrounded by rhinoceros horns
And beautiful feathers
Their faith seemed as devout as any other
He had known back home
One night, he was wakened by loud voices and shrills
He looked out his hut and saw a man being killed
He could not believe what he was seeing
They tied the man’s torn body with ropes
And placed him into the fire
“Oh my god! They’re cannibals!
Consuming each other!”
Their peaceful exterior
Was only an illusion
So as the villagers feasted
He silently slipped out of the village
For he determined it was far safer to face
The dangers of the outer jungle alone
Dear Jude,
As always you are able to draw your audience in with your captivating words. An exceptionally good read that had me wondering to the end. This would make a great story. Thanks for sharing of your versatile talent with your fellow artists.
Peace to you
Chanti
An excellent eye for detail and a strong narrative brought this tale to life. Well done.
Reviewed by M. B. (Reader)
Reviewed on February 1, 2005
Gosh, this could be a metaphor for the concrete jungle humanity resides in today. I don't know about you, but I've encountered my own share of cannibals on the streets of urban sprawl.
Loved the story effect and the building suspense in your lines. Terrific work! :)
Often things are not as they seem. His initial gut instinct was fear, but he allowed their hospitality and awe of him to color his judgement. Cultural traditions and people's will are difficult, if not impossible, to change. We can, for a while, delude others, but at some point, our true colors will show through. Excellent story/poem, Robert. One should always be aware of the people that they associate with, trust their gut feelings and never allow another to change the color of our world. The relationships that we have kept close for extended periods of time are the ones that we know we can trust to have our best interests at heart.
Take care,
Sherry
Seems no matter which jungle to choose we are in danger of being eaten...capitivating stuff Robert.
Paul;-}
Reviewed by La Belle Rouge (Reader)
Reviewed on February 1, 2005
For he determined it was far safer to face
The dangers of the outer jungle alone
The solitude and danger of the outer jungle looks better many times than life among devout cannibals. Sometimes we need our own private place to call home where we are strengthened and educated for the encounters with savages. Incredible story, deeply thought provoking, Jude.
Wow great story and I think the moral shines through at the end, sometimes we can only rely on ourselves to see us out of the jungles of reality, Great write Robert
Felix
Lol...scary...just remembered a question you asked about a funny arm
on my picture I posted with my poem "Tinky The Hardworking Farm Girl"
Well that was me holding the hind-quarter bones of an ox we slaughtered... and was showing you how to use it as a cricket-bat!!
Smacking a six {home-run in baseball} with it OKAY!!
Great picture, Robert. I've heard so many stories of people being lost in the jungle - and headhunter tribes can be very nice people. I would rather stay in the village - our western bodies are probably to polluted for consumption. Franz
For a minute there Rob, I thought you were headed for the POT, you had me on the edge of my seat LOL.
Extreme deliverance of a most painful subject.
Ch'erie
Reviewed by Tiana ~ (Reader)
Reviewed on February 1, 2005
What a story! Looks can be so deceiving and had he known, I'm sure he wouldn't have accepted their hospitality. Glad he got away unscathed or the cannibals would have had a luau in his honor! Whoa and what a feast! ;)
Many want to escape from the jungle of todays world of confusion and strife where it seems the savages are a majority forcing us into our own little worlds. Sadly that is not the answer,but no one seems to know the answer, so they just slip out of the village...
... Absolutely, and you never know when you're goin to be next!! Lucky man, unlucky lizard. Having a moon-face can obviously have it's advantages - though I have never thought so until now! Love the typo in line 3, where you are talking about erratic verse!! Captivating and salutary tale. TY Kate xx
Ron
As always you are able to draw your audience in with your captivating words. An exceptionally good read that had me wondering to the end. This would make a great story. Thanks for sharing of your versatile talent with your fellow artists.
Peace to you
Chanti
Superlatively versed - resoundingly perfect ...
Best regards,
Robert
Vesna :)
Loved the story effect and the building suspense in your lines. Terrific work! :)
D
PS: S1 L4: eratic-->erotic/erratic
I really enjoyed this the ACE..
Take care,
Sherry
Paul;-}
The dangers of the outer jungle alone
The solitude and danger of the outer jungle looks better many times than life among devout cannibals. Sometimes we need our own private place to call home where we are strengthened and educated for the encounters with savages. Incredible story, deeply thought provoking, Jude.
Felix
on my picture I posted with my poem "Tinky The Hardworking Farm Girl"
Well that was me holding the hind-quarter bones of an ox we slaughtered... and was showing you how to use it as a cricket-bat!!
Smacking a six {home-run in baseball} with it OKAY!!
Love Tinka
Extreme deliverance of a most painful subject.
Ch'erie
Allen
see how the title fits in here
enjoyed it.....