At least she realized that her longings were misplaced. She could have just given that rotating pixie on the top of her jewelry box a little **boing** and went back to her soaps.
Misplaced Longings! A powerful title for an equally powerful write, Jude. So many face this dilemma. It's sad, especially when you know or are close to someone dealing with this. Great job, and so well delivered!
I wondered where you were going with this and enjoyed the development of this character...and then as I read the last lines I literally gasped. It is masterful in its expression. This is one of the few times I've gone back to read a poem for a second time. Such insight you have Jude. Well done!
Chanti
So many rooms of the psyche to misplace longings...the smell of moth balls huddled together from packed-away emotions and the flashbacks of sepia-tinted dreams and tin-type memories stored in the scrapbook, but the sparkle of revival to misplaced longings is in the cameo brooch in the bottom of the cedar hope chest that gives a new breath to these lines,
"Waiting for the respiration of her heart
To resurrect their substance"
This has such a weariness about it that is crippling in terms of its scope - reaching back to the dim and distant past; galvanised by the surreal present, and defenceless and without sensory radar for the unknown future. A portrait that is storybook, wrought with compassion and crafted with care - like Brothers Grimm! Has an altogether adult complexity about it, though, as longings, in particular misplaced ones, tend to get established through habit over a very long period of time and, like clinging ivy, are very hard to cut yourself free of. And those are the very ones that tend to anaesthetise and suffocate our ability to think and feel anything outside of them. I think this "her" is in need of a handsome young woodsman to come aknocking at her door to shake her from her reverie and to produce some fresh timber with which to stoke her fires afresh! :)) LOL K xx
Jude, you capture the feelings of people so well, and paint a picture in our minds of how we are sometimes ourselves. A lost day, looking for lost feelings... haven't we all done this??? Excellent write.
Peace. Joyce
Reviewed by Kate Clifford (Reader)
Reviewed on November 27, 2006
And it is within this moment that answers are usually found if one is truly looking :-) Love the atmosphere that you built with your descriptions within this write.
Sometimes we give ourselves "stuff" to try and fill in all of our personal voids, but (hopefully) we learn that we don't change who we are or our life situation by putting up new curtains, rugs and bath towels. If we are going to grow we must do that introspectively and if we fail to take the responsibility for making those changes, we end up with misplaced longings and misplaced feelings and needed changes that may never come. Very thought provoking poem, Jude and it can be read so many ways.
Take care,
Sherry
Jude, this is wonderful -- your excellent imagery pulls the reader right into the poem, line by line, beginning with your masterful first two lines. Absolutely wonderful.
Love,
CJ
Because I've read many of your poems I know that you are not mocking the type of woman you describe here. Although I fear that for that woman, this poem was difficult to read. It is a very honest portrayal of dispair. ~ Sara
The compass does get skewed sometimes and the results are less than desirable.
It is one of the reasons that I desire to be in the mountains hiking so much - getting in touch with what's important is a natural occurence there. A powerful psychological extrapolation Robert.
This one takes the reader through a series of thoughts by the subject cumulating in the logical conclusion that the longings are always just inside the heart if we really look.
This one took me in so many directions, I might call on you for tips on how to get back to Poetry Central. A very entertaining venture into the hearts of others way off in a land of wonderment and pondering. Hellllllloooooooo. I'm ready to go back, nooow!
Bill
Reviewed by Victor Buhagiar (Reader)
Reviewed on November 25, 2006
When a person loses his/her aim of life, confusion sets in and you are right in making her search in all the wrong places. She should have looked within not without. Excellent poem. Victor
'Possibly she left them in the attic
Where curious of her childhood
Housed the museum of her memories' ~ Brilliantly written verse and poem entire!!
And oh how, how we allow our feelings to become consumed by misplaced longings... 'misplaced' being the operative word. (Well I say we on behalf of me.)
Great poem Jude! :-D
Reviewed by Andy Turner (Reader)
Reviewed on November 25, 2006
Misplaced feeling, and longings, tired or chaotic minds do this, yet this alludes to the slow degeneration into senile dementia..
Or it's just a bloody well written piece and I'm looking far to deep..
Robert,
This is one outstanding write
Reminds me of my mother
at times she would look at me
with a beautiful smile, upon her face
Wondering who this person
standing before her was
Peace
Contraband Marriage, traveling along the hemline of loving after incarceration, is a love story written in lyric and free form, set in reality with a different ever after.
Chrissy
This is exceptionally penned and articulated, Jude...and you should hear how it sounds, being read to the sax-only version of "Town Without Pity"!
You are so gifted, Brother..
Love&Prayers, Rhonda
Blessings,
Joyce Bowling
NICE write.
God Bless
Lena
Wendi
Staring into the fireplace
Wondering how her feelings
Became so consumed by her misplaced longings
Ooooo..this just about sums me up..mmmmm
insightful poem..well for me it is!
Thankyou Jude..
THIS is a keeper..
Vesna.)
Brett
Chanti
"Waiting for the respiration of her heart
To resurrect their substance"
Sage
Peace. Joyce
Carole
brilliant composition, Jude.
Sandie Angel a.k.a. Sandie May Angel :o)
Some days we contimplate
Some days we wait
Then we realize. . . .
Once again. . . .
Too late.
Great write.
DWB
P.S.: just kidding
Neglected by the silence of dreams"
I love those lines.
Take care,
Sherry
Love,
CJ
Best wishes
It is one of the reasons that I desire to be in the mountains hiking so much - getting in touch with what's important is a natural occurence there. A powerful psychological extrapolation Robert.
Light and Wisdom ...
Richard Lloyd Cederberg
pictures dusty on the walls
can see this very clearly
Ron
Fee
Love Tinka
Susan
Bill
Where curious of her childhood
Housed the museum of her memories' ~ Brilliantly written verse and poem entire!!
And oh how, how we allow our feelings to become consumed by misplaced longings... 'misplaced' being the operative word. (Well I say we on behalf of me.)
Great poem Jude! :-D
Or it's just a bloody well written piece and I'm looking far to deep..
This is one outstanding write
Reminds me of my mother
at times she would look at me
with a beautiful smile, upon her face
Wondering who this person
standing before her was
Peace
William