The visual image you create here is striking. I particularly like the word choice (murder instead of flock) and the optimism for the climbers. I have seen "a murder of crows pepper snow mountain treetops" myself -the contrast of jet black against stark white. This is one fine Haiku !
~Butch
Climbers are so in tune with all the elements around them. Guess these guys will have been communing with those crows big time, who are both alive to the dangers and in sync with the blessings of all that that mountains of aspiration can bring. As Richard suggests, the crow family are like angels on your shoulder, accompanying the journey whether you survive or no - but covering, guiding your footsteps and vulnerability either way. Climbers do not only live in hope and vision, but they die in the knowledge that earth is too small for them and that heaven is only the next vista away. I have no idea about the Oregon climbers who might be the real basis for this write, but know that they will find refuge in the mountains to which their souls have been committed. Whatever the outcome, it is as if coming home to them... If not now, then some day... This ku says much about the driving force of both obsession and the iron will of determination, satisfying the need they create. Climbers have the minds of compasses set at true North and will never be deterred. K xx
interesting write though i'd use flock and an adjective in front of it but that's me...or an adjective in front of crows might be easier now that i think of it... still, good read
Succinct, but spatial and personal for me in content.
From much experience, I have come to learn that Crows and Ravens can be good friends when you are out hiking in nature. They hover above you, or land close, and they talk. Sometimes - like hawks - they will even confirm, or show you, a path to be taken to avoid trouble. A fine write Robert!
Richard Lloyd Cederberg
Reviewed by Dove JoAnne Cromp (Reader)
Reviewed on December 16, 2006
Wow..This was a painted portrait of beauty..Diffrent, yet stunningly original..
excellent work...what I really liked here was your use of "murder of crows"...oddly I knew what that was...something once read...it use here was a master stroke.
Our hearts and prayers are with the 3 lost mountain climbers as well, very good haiku...love this style, you've penned it well my friend.
Blessings to you and Merry Christmas,
Joyce Bowling
This is beautiful. Especially after the explaination of "a murder of crows." At first I thought the murdered crows had peppered the treetops. Excellent haiku, Jude.
A beautiful Haiku in its own right, Jude, and for me it renews my hope that the lost climbers will be found in good condition. Even if that is not what you were alluding to when you penned this gem, it comes at a most appropriate time to be a tribute to them.
Take care,
Sherry
Reviewed by J M (Reader)
Reviewed on December 15, 2006
This one has an excellent expression and form thank you!
Publish-speak, dead crows scare away live crows...on another note, hope the three mountain climbers will be rescued from Mt. Hood, Oregon and found to be alive...the National Guard struck out today...
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loved the title too!!
~Butch
Ron
Thanks for sharing Robert
Peace
William
Carmen
TRASK
And this is enough to keep them alive.
Love & Light always and in all ways,
Joseph*
Aberjhani
From much experience, I have come to learn that Crows and Ravens can be good friends when you are out hiking in nature. They hover above you, or land close, and they talk. Sometimes - like hawks - they will even confirm, or show you, a path to be taken to avoid trouble. A fine write Robert!
Richard Lloyd Cederberg
Love Tinka
Love and Happy Christmas,
CJ
Susan
Susan
Blessings to you and Merry Christmas,
Joyce Bowling
Fee
I too hope...along with those climbers
Love and Peace~
Kimmy~
Take care,
Sherry
Sage