The aftermath of fallout
Grows feverishly under shallow skin"
Whew I know a few people around like that...self absorbed.
A sparkling penning again Jude.
Much misery is caused by shallow skin, it fosters, war, murder,
divorce, and many more tragedies, besides lesser miseries. You penned another brilliant poem, Jude!
You pack a lot of emotion in powerful verse. You pack a lot of truth in powerful verse. What can I say, but powerful? You moved me today with your words; thank you!
So wrapped up in one’s own delusions
Only aloofness is close to the heart... Ivory tower stuff here...
We speak but never listen. When we listen, often it is only to the sound of our own voice. We rehearse over and over our own arguments and postulations before we ever take on board the points of others. Few hear - to hear means to be open enough to take on board what is being said without prejudice. No wonder the world is at fever pitch.
A nice show of this your craft or sullen art, DT! Written for the lovers, their arms round the griefs of the ages... and not for the arrogant or the towering dead. Too many of us follow the dead edicts of all that has gone before (often bancrupted)... rather than to follow the prophetic notes of the tunes of the future. TY K xx
Reviewed by Kate Clifford (Reader)
Reviewed on February 15, 2007
Sadly those with shallow skin are rarely aware of it. Great character sketch.
Shallow people do tend to think that their telescopic view of the world is the correct one, never daring to move, alter their paradigm.
Good points made. Peeps just need to let the ego go..
Reviewed by Anna Marie Fritz (Reader)
Reviewed on February 15, 2007
And so many different moods and manners we poets possess!
An excellent write, Jude!
There are many takes below on this poem Robert. There are also many ways to deal with what passes through the heart and mind for an artist or a writer. Some are good at it, some are not!
Ranting or venting is legitimate as far as I'm concerned, as long as you're dealing with the spirit of the matter and not the fallen nature of the human. Everyone has problems and is need of repairs mentally, emotionally, and spiritually.
Some poets and writers are quite obvious about their disdain for anothers work or character. Detestably so! Some are not so obvious. Some poets and writers are only interested in trashing what they see as beneath them in the realm of words, and some need controversy and discontent to write. Some are just jealous of something they percieve about another which may or may not be accurate.People are complicated!
I wonder if people actually sat down and broke bread with one another, and talked face to face, and even laughed, if there would be such trouble? Keep cutting the edge Robert.
This sounds like the saga we are all listening to these days with the five men claiming to be the little baby's father...The aftermath of fallout is going to be another whole saga! "Shallow Skin","...Legitimacy is analyzed by a quirk of reason..."
Very well done. Jude
Love and Peace~
Kimmy~
Robert,
This write touches almost every aspect of life, in these days and times. From personal to politcal, it corrals our senses.
You've pointed poignantly, at all mankind, and done it as though you're putting the entire world on notice.
Stunning work Robert.
I'll have to say you have characterized a whole lot of people. Isn't it a reality that some would always take another's writings as their own thoughts and then very often go about to characterized that person?
We are all being characterized by many who use their own delusionalized judgments on others, they believe that their own thoughts are the truth, but yet, the one who knows about the other person well is the person themselves.
Poets here on this board are very sensitive. Some of us lead different lives, but our experiences in life are sometimes the same; when we write, we write about ourselves only, about our feelings; but some other poets just took it wrong, and thought you are talking about them.
There is also the matter of giving reviews, even if you SPECIFICALLY STATED that it was only YOUR HUMBLE OPINION, the author still would take to offence at what you say.
I think we all need to learn that each of us do state our own thoughts, whether or not it be in a poem, or it be in a review we view the poem, the readers or authors need not take it to offence at what we say, it is simply one person's opinion toward another.
A writer need to have thicker skin, because if you can't even survive in a writers' site, you can survive the brutal remarks from the critics and editors. That is the reality of it.
One need not beating about to bush in order to help a friend in their writings. One should simply just write to the other person and ask if he/she can make some suggestions in their writings. The latter is of a more welcome thought and action.
What I don't like is that people make mocking poetry about your mistake, rather than to write directly to you to point out your mistake. The latter of the action is so much more clearer to the author, and he/she would be so happy to receive the advice from a fellow writer who does not mock his/her work, but to give direct information on how the author can improve in that piece of writing.
But to write mocking poetry and let other guess what it is who it is for is very cruel to another. It isn't fair to do that to an author who wrote in the order to pour his/her heart and soul out on the paper; or one who does his/her very best to write and thought the work good and satisfied.
A more direct approach to e-mail another about his/her mistake is always a more welcoming act than writing mocking poetry at others. For if you don't, the person would never know, for a person who has poured his/her heart out to write really does not care for how others think of their work, for it is their very own feelings on paper, and is of no concern to others. However, when being approached by another in the correct manner, something good would always come out of it, and the advisor would always be properly thank for his/her advice.
Once again...the above is just MY HUMBLE OPINION.
Sandie Angel :o)
Reviewed by ~ Holly Harbridge (Reader)
Reviewed on February 15, 2007
Excellent work Robert. You have a way of making one think. 'Shallow Skin' depcits many, although the many, do not always know who they are. Well done! Holly
I spent many good years trying to get the shallow to deepen in some people in my life. It can't happen if they don't want it. Some things are just made to be superficial. Beautiful piece.
WOW! "Shallow Skin" has captured the characterization of millions of people. It's kind of like people's minds are a sieve where everything passes through a mixture of thoughts, beliefs, and perceptions to create a whole new picture of what someone else is saying. Thus, communication is watered down no matter how cleanly or expertly stated. Very thoughtful poem and well-written.
As intrinsic as a geometry equation but as strong as a hurricane, this intense write captures the thoughts and lets them think of all the possibilities that such vivid lines posses.
ha
that causes, high blood pressure, strokes, stress, cortisol, mental breakdowns, and hosts of other unwanted manifestiations
Wrapped in ones own delusions, is toxic
We are so complex and nutz as human beings
but thats part of the package i guess
Good writing Jude, pax A
evolution is usually a result of those that do not follow the narrow path, and thankfully i consider myself one of those dense mem-brains who never really gets it right
People can be so caught up in their own interpretation of what truth is that they refuse to listen to reason. It seems that there are more and more of these "no common sense" people in our world with each passing year; It is enough to make one wonder, in what closet have they spent their entire life? Perhaps it is the feeling of having little control over what is going on in the world and possibly in their own life that causes people to dig their heels in and refuse to listen to alternative thoughts. This one is a heel of the hand slap right between the eyes, Jude. Nice work!
Take care,
Sherry
Reviewed by Victor Buhagiar (Reader)
Reviewed on February 14, 2007
Great charaterization even if the person is not to be admired. Shows your power with words. Victor
Embracing SHALLOW SKIN as Confucianism, tutelage on the moral order of post-fallout to be reclaimed. Confucius sits here in the Forese den, the centre of a civilized terrace, in an imagined conversation. Forese supervises and maintains harmony by ensuring that poets perform flexible functions ranging from oracular, historical, visionary to outlaw folk poetry. Has a correlation to Book of Changes (I Ching)...Jude, this is wisdom that cannot be marginalized or denied...
Robin Ouzman Hislop's poetry is certainly in dialogue with some of the key architects of the 'poetics of indeterminacy' – both the Modernist strands represented by the likes of Beckett and Stein, and the postmodernist strands represented, initially,
Robin Ouzman Hislop's poetry is certainly in dialogue with some of the key architects of the 'poetics of indeterminacy' – both the Modernist strands represented by the likes of Beckett and Stein, and the postmodernist strands represented, initially,
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"Shallow Skin"
"self-induced war
The aftermath of fallout
Grows feverishly under shallow skin"
Whew I know a few people around like that...self absorbed.
A sparkling penning again Jude.
Spiritual love to you,
~Gwendolyn
it is easy to get caught-up in self
just don't stay there dangerous
Ron
~hugs~
Karen
Your discernment is masterful, as always, and your style is brilliant.
Love, Rhonda
divorce, and many more tragedies, besides lesser miseries. You penned another brilliant poem, Jude!
very nice work.....Art Sun...
You pack a lot of emotion in powerful verse. You pack a lot of truth in powerful verse. What can I say, but powerful? You moved me today with your words; thank you!
(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.
Only aloofness is close to the heart... Ivory tower stuff here...
We speak but never listen. When we listen, often it is only to the sound of our own voice. We rehearse over and over our own arguments and postulations before we ever take on board the points of others. Few hear - to hear means to be open enough to take on board what is being said without prejudice. No wonder the world is at fever pitch.
A nice show of this your craft or sullen art, DT! Written for the lovers, their arms round the griefs of the ages... and not for the arrogant or the towering dead. Too many of us follow the dead edicts of all that has gone before (often bancrupted)... rather than to follow the prophetic notes of the tunes of the future. TY K xx
Hope you had a Happy V-Day!!
Love Tinka
Good points made. Peeps just need to let the ego go..
An excellent write, Jude!
Ranting or venting is legitimate as far as I'm concerned, as long as you're dealing with the spirit of the matter and not the fallen nature of the human. Everyone has problems and is need of repairs mentally, emotionally, and spiritually.
Some poets and writers are quite obvious about their disdain for anothers work or character. Detestably so! Some are not so obvious. Some poets and writers are only interested in trashing what they see as beneath them in the realm of words, and some need controversy and discontent to write. Some are just jealous of something they percieve about another which may or may not be accurate.People are complicated!
I wonder if people actually sat down and broke bread with one another, and talked face to face, and even laughed, if there would be such trouble? Keep cutting the edge Robert.
Light and Wisdom ...
Them that torture themselves are doomed to succeed.
Nice writing!!!
Georg
Very well done. Jude
Love and Peace~
Kimmy~
Love,
CJ
Very powerful write my friend. Blessings
This write touches almost every aspect of life, in these days and times. From personal to politcal, it corrals our senses.
You've pointed poignantly, at all mankind, and done it as though you're putting the entire world on notice.
Stunning work Robert.
Lisa
We are all being characterized by many who use their own delusionalized judgments on others, they believe that their own thoughts are the truth, but yet, the one who knows about the other person well is the person themselves.
Poets here on this board are very sensitive. Some of us lead different lives, but our experiences in life are sometimes the same; when we write, we write about ourselves only, about our feelings; but some other poets just took it wrong, and thought you are talking about them.
There is also the matter of giving reviews, even if you SPECIFICALLY STATED that it was only YOUR HUMBLE OPINION, the author still would take to offence at what you say.
I think we all need to learn that each of us do state our own thoughts, whether or not it be in a poem, or it be in a review we view the poem, the readers or authors need not take it to offence at what we say, it is simply one person's opinion toward another.
A writer need to have thicker skin, because if you can't even survive in a writers' site, you can survive the brutal remarks from the critics and editors. That is the reality of it.
One need not beating about to bush in order to help a friend in their writings. One should simply just write to the other person and ask if he/she can make some suggestions in their writings. The latter is of a more welcome thought and action.
What I don't like is that people make mocking poetry about your mistake, rather than to write directly to you to point out your mistake. The latter of the action is so much more clearer to the author, and he/she would be so happy to receive the advice from a fellow writer who does not mock his/her work, but to give direct information on how the author can improve in that piece of writing.
But to write mocking poetry and let other guess what it is who it is for is very cruel to another. It isn't fair to do that to an author who wrote in the order to pour his/her heart and soul out on the paper; or one who does his/her very best to write and thought the work good and satisfied.
A more direct approach to e-mail another about his/her mistake is always a more welcoming act than writing mocking poetry at others. For if you don't, the person would never know, for a person who has poured his/her heart out to write really does not care for how others think of their work, for it is their very own feelings on paper, and is of no concern to others. However, when being approached by another in the correct manner, something good would always come out of it, and the advisor would always be properly thank for his/her advice.
Once again...the above is just MY HUMBLE OPINION.
Sandie Angel :o)
George
Fee
that causes, high blood pressure, strokes, stress, cortisol, mental breakdowns, and hosts of other unwanted manifestiations
Wrapped in ones own delusions, is toxic
We are so complex and nutz as human beings
but thats part of the package i guess
Good writing Jude, pax A
well penned, jude.
peace,
carolyn
randy
Take care,
Sherry
Edwin
Michael
Sage
The aftermath of fallout
Grows feverishly under shallow skin
Leaves me with the feeling of sudden destruction...
Great write my friend,
Blessings,
Joyce Bowling
Happy Valentine's Day Jude.
Love,
Susan