That which in enduring eyes must sigh; At evening's stale breath inquires why; Does in circumstance and eager condition lie; Sees man devoid of kind devices for reply.
He says to himself, "I don't know," In prose, his feeble excuses flow - His eyes titter on the edge with a glow ... Of verse! Of logic! Of that which we think we know!
His scars! His shine! A maddened course! Twist and gnaws his teeth of remorse ... Of course! His metamorphosis's erodes with force, Yes! Yes! Our braggart screams at us, until he's hoarse!
Skilled in the art of intense confusion, He knows he's the master of sly illusion.. He says he's the source of all delusion - Before he retreats again into seclusion!
That which in enduring eyes deny; Thinks everyone else is a spy. Justifies himself and his sum, by and by ... Eventually, he considers the works a lie!
My thought for today:
If we could play a video tape of our lives, who would we see?
Janet Caldwell 10/22/2003 If we could play a video tape of our lives, who would we see?
I'd see insanity, humanity, craftily, flirty, yada yada! ;) Actually, I'd keep looking to see what more I could do to better myself in order to better my fellow man.
Love, Janet xoxoxo Reviewed by Karen Cino 10/20/2003 Excellent write. I loved the perfection of the following lines:
Skilled in the art of intense confusion, He knows he's the master of sly illusion.. He says he's the source of all delusion - Before he retreats again into seclusion!
You just described the life of a poet/writer...Karen
Reviewed by Regina Pounds 10/19/2003 Wonderful challenge, dear Shy...profound thoughts well written.
Gina Reviewed by James Pajot 10/19/2003 Great imagery!!!"Thinks everyone else is a spy." I loved this tilt at paranoia. Reviewed by Leland Waldrip 10/18/2003 Deep questions here, Shy. Someone said, "If we could only see ourselves as others see us ..." Great write. Best regards, Leland Reviewed by Jackie Huntington 10/18/2003 A brilliant piece!!! I particularly love your thought...
"If we could play a video tape of our lives, who would we see?"
Really makes one think.
~Jackie~
Reviewed by Honi Honi 10/18/2003 Outstanding poetry, Shy! Always a pleasure to read... aloha :) Reviewed by Kate Clifford 10/17/2003 Interesting question that you have left us with. Great write! Reviewed by Floria Kelderhouse 10/17/2003 Absolutely brilliant and profound and I KNOW you Shy...and so ...I feel I KNOW the poem...its essence....it is one of your best....I am trying hard to answer your question but I can't... I am not sure how I see myself....but to sum it up...I would hope that most see me full of love for humanity....and hope....lots of hope thrown in there...gosh you have got us all thinking with this magnificent write..I am so glad I found time to come on here friend...Standing ovation on this one......Floria Reviewed by AKA ShyPoet1 10/17/2003 Thanks everyone.
I do appreciate it greatly. Eileen - you must be somewhere cold. I've been there myself. I am, of course, a sweet November baby. So it is always my month!
I removed one word from these 2 line:
"He says to himself, "I don't know," In prose, his feeble excuses flow -"
"He says to himself, "I don't know," "Expressed" In prose, his feeble excuses flow -"
Great answer Kay. There's a great poem in your answer! Wise words to reflect on oneself in that manner.
Much love everyone!
PS - wrote this one late last night, ah relief, then I could sleep!
Reviewed by Retta (Reindeer) Mckenzie 10/17/2003 Wow..I loved this, powerfully written! Wonderful verses and flow,
Reindeer Reviewed by Helga Ross 10/17/2003 This is wonderful! Great poetry! Reviewed by George Akurunwa 10/17/2003 Beautiful flow, great rivating lines. Reviewed by May Lu a.k.a. Sandie Angel 10/17/2003 Shy:
This is soooo wonderfully-written. There are so many imageries and they are all so thougt-provoking. My favourite two lines in here:
"He says to himself, "I don't know," In prose, his feeble excuses flow -"
Great write indeed!
May Lu a.k.a. Sandie Angel :o) Reviewed by La Belle Rouge 10/17/2003 Wonderfully done, such a pleasure to read, thought provoking depth. Reviewed by Kay P Devenish 10/17/2003 To answer the question,rolled into one...I would see my hero.... and...the one who tripped me over most,(me.)Contrary lady,the star and villian. Yes,I would know her,like her?not always,love her,yes,(cause someone has to.)One thing for sure in that video,I would get a good cry but as well...I'd have a bloody great laugh.A comedy of errors it would surely be. Shy...only you could come up with this deeply profound poem,I love it! I think if I watched the video of your life,I might just see...an awesome poet. love from kay. Reviewed by Zenith Elliott 10/17/2003 Excellent, very profound and thought provoking! ~Z~ Reviewed by Peggy Bertrand 10/17/2003 ShyPoet 1 This is so beautiful the flow and rhyme. a beautiful write. Peggy Reviewed by Emilie Dybevik 10/16/2003 I loved this:
"He says to himself, "I don't know," In prose, his feeble excuses flow -"
This poem has so much depth...I love how you make me think. Your thoughts are just ....waaaaaaaoooow! Enjoyed reading it and felt several different emotions in doing so. Loved it :) Those last two stanza --- you tore it up! Applause!
Thank You, Teresa E. Reviewed by Eileen Waldron 10/16/2003 Shy, you give me hope that there may be a season of reason coming we sure could use one! Great poetry! I have only dire thoughts for November, hope I'm wrong... Reviewed by Bhuwan Thapaliya 10/16/2003 Aka, He says to himself, "I don't know," In prose, his feeble excuses flow - His eyes titter on the edge with a glow ... Of verse! Of logic! Of that which we think we know!
Excellent write of reason my friend....BHUWAN Reviewed by Justin D' Souza 10/16/2003 Brilliant! Wonderful idea..
Dear Friend, AKA Shy, please submit this poem and up to 4 others for inclusion in the international issue of Poetry in Emotion (Canada) ISSN 1705-4516, Winter, 2004, Vol. 3, no. 1.
Poems should not exceed 40 lines.
You are a very very fine poet indeed, indeed genial...
Also forward a brief bio 3-4 sentences. I shall publish 2 of the 5 you send (the ones I like the most, of course! :) :) :) )
send to:
vallance22.gosympatico.ca
NOTE to other poets and authors on AD, please do not send unsolicited mms. or poems. I am too "snowed-under", being a Canuck in an igloo :) :) :)
A disciplined and expressive piece of literary effort. Thank you.
Reviewed by Vesna Perkovic (Reader)
Reviewed on October 27, 2003
Skilled in the art of intense confusion,
He knows he's the master of sly illusion..
He says he's the source of all delusion -
Before he retreats again into seclusion
...indeed...
VESNA :)..well done!
Reviewed by Jaclynn Huntington (Reader)
Reviewed on October 26, 2003
I enjoyed reading this the second time around as much as the first. One can learn much from this read, my friend.
I am responding because--well, I like it the second time around too! So na na na na na! :)~ Excellent work. I believe your poem captures the intended purpose quite well. You always knock subject matter such as this OUT COLD! I LOVED IT...again! So ... there! ;) Most excellent poetry and wonderful thought for the day. I came, I saw--I reviewed :)
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pensive, and loved the introspection
excellent job! Donna
ABSOLUTELY BRILLIANT!
Dear Friend, AKA Shy, please submit this poem and up to 4 others for inclusion in the international issue of Poetry in Emotion (Canada) ISSN 1705-4516, Winter, 2004, Vol. 3, no. 1.
Poems should not exceed 40 lines.
You are a very very fine poet indeed, indeed genial...
Also forward a brief bio 3-4 sentences. I shall publish 2 of the 5 you send (the ones I like the most, of course! :) :) :) )
send to:
vallance22.gosympatico.ca
NOTE to other poets and authors on AD, please do not send unsolicited mms. or poems. I am too "snowed-under", being a Canuck in an igloo :) :) :)
Bye for now,
Richard Vallance
LOL, actually here's stars in your eyes!
:) :) :)
He knows he's the master of sly illusion..
He says he's the source of all delusion -
Before he retreats again into seclusion
...indeed...
VESNA :)..well done!
~Jackie~
Carmen
Thank you again:)
Teresa Emilie