Sometimes, rewriting does improve our poetry. Having not read the original version, however, all I can say is that this IS a marvelous poem, expressing the deep sense of solitude that follows the end of a significant relationship in a perfect way.
Love&Light*
Alexandra*
Such subtle strength and dignity, couched in a lyrical softness. Awe and adoration. "Once the night was jade and silver, A jewel of misty beginnings" - beautiful line! TY Kate xx
Wistful write, Dale. Where does love go? A question we ask ourselves over and over in a short lifetime. This echoes my post, especially the last line...
Glittering lines like a coin of romance tossed in the air and sparkling with sides equally bitter and sweet. A great write.
Reviewed by Tracey L. O' Very (Reader)
Reviewed on May 14, 2005
Dale,
This is an exquisite poem of a heart and soul of true love for another, deeply darkened, torn and lost.
It reaches right into the heart and pours out with solitude emotions.
Exquisite.
Tracey
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Excellent writing!
Peace,
Joseph
Love&Light*
Alexandra*
M.Rose
Sandie Angel a.k.a. Sandie May Angel :o)
This is an exquisite poem of a heart and soul of true love for another, deeply darkened, torn and lost.
It reaches right into the heart and pours out with solitude emotions.
Exquisite.
Tracey
the last verse is so good! Just the way I feel at times;-)
Love,
Eileen
Even more beautiful with the second read!!
Love Tinky!!