Deep in waters dark I swam contented. Seeing things not as they were, I instead imagined endless rivers of rainbow – gentle, gushing streams of goodness. I needed not a wider, clearer sea.
Hooked with nylon fishing line and reeled in by a laughing God, I was just another thrashing sinner blinded by piercing light of brighter world, afraid for my own darkness to be exposed.
Having caught me, Creator removed with care painful anchor lodged in my tender side. He touched my eyes, replaced them with electrified spheres, neon green, wild, wandering, freakish.
Mostly we see eye to Eye the Fisher King and I. He threw me back a time or two when I began seeing things not as they were. Methinks he likes to remind me of a wider, clearer sea.
i'm glad he did, it reflects in your poem ... superb style and motif ...
Reviewed by Jane Rodway (Reader)
Reviewed on June 6, 2004
very good style, the set-up on this works well, at first I thought I wouldn't like the spacing, but by the end I saw how it worked so well. Great write.
Just fantastically brilliant, this write, Dawn! I think that again you have been majorly inspired and I am keeping this to perhaps use, if appropriate and if you would grant me permission, when praying with people who need assurance and comfort in their pain. Of course, I will not do so if you would not agree to this. But the message is profound and so clearly stated... and the flow is unique and journeying, as in the way you have set this piece out. Truly inspirational and "God-breathed", I would say! Thankyou for this. Kate xx
Great images and meaning expressed in these verses, Dawn. Thank you. Love and peace. Regis
Reviewed by Lady Peg (Reader)
Reviewed on June 5, 2004
Dawn,
Beautiful poetry!!!
"Having caught me, Creator
removed with care painful anchor lodged
in my tender side. He touched my eyes,
replaced them with electrified spheres,
neon green, wild, wandering, freakish.
Mostly we see eye to Eye
the Fisher King and I. He threw me back
a time or two when I began seeing things
not as they were. Methinks he likes
to remind me of a wider, clearer sea."
Reviewed by *********** ********** (Reader)
Reviewed on June 4, 2004
You have a most beautiful, and intense way with words.....another fantastic write Dawn......ty, Dani
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Inspirational Dawn.
John
lots of water writes
here tonght, I love
William
Beautiful poetry!!!
"Having caught me, Creator
removed with care painful anchor lodged
in my tender side. He touched my eyes,
replaced them with electrified spheres,
neon green, wild, wandering, freakish.
Mostly we see eye to Eye
the Fisher King and I. He threw me back
a time or two when I began seeing things
not as they were. Methinks he likes
to remind me of a wider, clearer sea."
As good a a Michelangelo!
Allen