My sister you must continue to live within your words I have been this road. Your mission on this earth is not complete. Continue to rise and God will be there for you. I read your work with such a gentle spirit that you display. I can see you writing children books. Your spirit is very calm, and you write with truth an love.

nothin is too far out there....as long as it comes from within....i think this is a good piece.

another excellent write. Cheryl

Dynamic write, way to go!

Hi dear,
A very nice flow with a challenging combination of words! Bravo..

Lori, thank God you don't feel that way now! Writing can be such a release during those dark days. God Bless you! Tim

Lori, that was a very close to being too real. I am an ER nurse, and see just the results of those feelings everyday, and your words expressed them very well.

Not too far out at all, I believe almost every sensitive person has felt this if not acted on it at one time or another. This is good work Lori.

Congrats ...
wonderful challenge ...
you did it better ..
Keep it up

great well worked poem that reads as well as its written, take care of yourself..Mark...

Excellent seperation of voice in the verse. from emotions..

I would love to think, believe and know you are truly free. An excellent poem with the usage of those very vivid verses.
Amor

Powerfully felt write--you more than met the challenge...

Poetry is the best therapy, in my opinion. Dark Poetry is an excellent way to get the subconscious (or conscious!) negative thoughts out without harming anyone, including yourself. This is not too far out, not at all...at least not to me, but then I write dark poetry myself:) Good job, Lori...I like it.

Lori I actually find most of my better writes are the dark ones because there is usually more dark experiences to draw from life then happy ones.
so I wouldn't worry about it
And this was another masterpiece. you are so very talented

Lori,
I love working with challenges in poetry, it is another way to defuse the negatives!! You have handled this one very well! And Hey, you should see the poem I just posted! LOL! It is dark, we are human, and it does pass!
Hopefully, our words when we are in this place, will bring comfort to someone else who is there also. So they will know they are not walking alone!:o) That is how I feel anyway, when I read poetry that expresses a feeling I have known all too well, regardless of the emotion!

Hugs,
Maria

and you took those words and created a masterpiece! Excellent write my friend.

Hope all is well in your world...

Love
Melanie

Here are some nice song lyrics, Lori. Suicide is too easy. Some folks live in a bubble and need to face the real world. I care about you but I'm tired of all the lies. And the United States is just a small part of the world.
Love, Alex


RICH FOLKS HOAX

by Rodriguez

The moon is hanging in the purple sky
The baby's sleeping while its mother sighs
Talking 'bout the rich folks
Rich folks have the same jokes
And they park in basic places.

The priest is preaching from a shallow grave
He counts his money, then he paints you saved
Talking to the young folks
Young folks share the same jokes
But they meet in older places.

So don't tell me about your success
Nor your recipes for my happiness
Smoke in bed.
I never could digest
Those illusions you think to have going.

The sun is shining, as it's always done
Coffin dust is the fate of everyone
Talking 'bout the rich folks
The poor create the rich hoax
And only late breast-fed fools believe it.

Great usage of words, Lori..
Jenni

will you really be?

It is always a pleasure to read your writing whatever the subject ,because you do it with such flair!

peggy is right I too use as therapy it feels good to get it all out "better out than in"...as I hear it