Wild lavender violets
From deep dark woods
Indigo skies
Blue eyes
Sometimes green
Emerald like yours
Depending on mood or weather
Yellow fields of canola
In golden summer afternoons
Orange tiger lilies
Bowing in the breeze
And sunsets bathed in scarlet hues
How lovely relating a love for someone with all the colours of the rainbow. Rainbows always seem to bring such joy into the hearts of people. Thanks for reading my poem
A LOVE FOR 'ALL' SEASONS...CERTAINLY, A 'GIFT' RARE AND PRECIOUS...LIKE A RAINBOW! THANKS FOR SHARING, REGIS...ENJOYED MUCH. LOVE, BLESSINGS AND FAITH...JOYCE * HIS INSPIRATIONS
Beautiful Regis...being from the so called "Rainbow Nation Country" SOUTH AFRICA...this is what love should be all about...colorful and filled with fun :)!!
Color my world beautiful...Reg your poem is perfect just as is~
Blessings,
Christine
Reviewed by RWE SAYS BYE (Reader)
Reviewed on October 30, 2011
a kaleidoscope of emotion expressed with succinct imagery. I would not change a thing. The only thing I question is making something so seemingly intimate public... just me, I guess, but PDAs turn me off.
Dearest Regis, I just Love the colors
of Your Heart...and would Never change
how You express it....so, praying that
you will forever keep crayolas on hand!!!
An absolutely lovely poem; can't imagine why anyone would find any fault with it??? All of your work is consistently good, Regis. Correction: I would have to say that it is excellent. Enjoyable read.
cosmic and spiritual unity Regis -- you have internalized this work as your expression reveals -- sounds like a heart smitten to me my dear friend -- it is good to see you share your poetic talents with us again -- I bid you joy, love and peace -- Jon Michael
Well, I for one, like your work Regis. I'm kinda nervous about posting anything from here on out though. Hope you're good friends with Lena, cause she certainly shredded your poem.
I’ve always considered you to be one of the more accomplished poets here on the Den. I want to continue to grow and learn, but I'm afraid my skin is too thin to stand up to that kind of a scathing review.
Now THIS is the world we all want to have a share in, Regis! Such a place of vivid harmony and hue would cause us all to smile and feel at peace. :)) The perfect gift and you the perfect giver. May you always share such brilliant and perfect days such as this together. xx
The idea of the poem is great and the poem is good but I think you can make it even better with some editing.
I would start the poem with "Wild lavender violets" and end it with "And sunsets bathed in scarlet hues". The lines before the big stanza and after it don't do anything for the poem. They just seem to take up space. You can have those lines in the description or in a different font before the poem. Something like... My love. Let my gift be a rainbow of love.
I am not a fan of the line "Depending on mood or weather". It is not poetic really. And it sounds weak compared to your last line "And sunsets bathed in scarlet hues". “Blue eyes”, “Sometimes green”, and “Emerald like yours” don’t stand out either.
"And sunsets bathed in scarlet hues" is actually my most favorite line in the poem and I think it is the best one. I think all your lines in the poem should top this one. That would make the poem unforgettable and that much more beautiful.
Towards the end of your poem you write… "Orange tiger lilies bowing in the breeze" and "Sunsets bathed in scarlet hues". In these two lines you mention an object/thing (orange tiger lilies, sunsets) and attach an action verb after it (bowing, bathed). Why aren't you doing the same thing with the other lines in the poem? If you do that with the other lines in the poem, the poem will become that much better. It will instantly connect with the heart in a way it doesn’t right now. And the flow will be smoother too as it is not 100% smooth right now. I am not saying every line must have an action verb but if you are including an object/thing in your poem (like wild lavender violets, indigo skies, yellow fields of canola, etc.) then have it do something… like what you did with the sunsets and the orange tiger lilies. Hope you understand what I am trying to say here.
Well, I hope I have been of some help to you Regis. Let me know your thoughts on what I’ve shared with you regarding this poem.
Thanks for sharing and please keep on writing!!!!!
A gift to be cherished. I'm glad you didn't choose goldenrod, Regis. Achoo! Your rainbow is filled with the loveliest colors.
The picture is the perfect backdrop. I like the mischievous side in your bio picture, too.
Nobleman's son, Todd Ramble, returns home after years abroad and finds himself falling in love with his step-sister, who was now a grown woman. Unfortunately their love is brutally challenged by his tyrannical father.
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Just downloaded Ken Russell's adaptation of D.H. Lawrence's novel 'The Rainbow' and it's looking good!
Very sweet. I enjoy your poems. Mostly because they are expressions of joy.
peace & blessings,
carolyn
Peace,
Dayvid
A rainbow fill with the colors of true love!
Let my gift be
A rainbow of love
Stunning love poem regis..hugsss :)
Enjoyed lots Regis!
~ZACH
Sincerely,
Regino
most enjoyable reading
Peace be with you
William
Sheila
Anna
Love TinkaSweets
Blessings,
Christine
Roger
of Your Heart...and would Never change
how You express it....so, praying that
you will forever keep crayolas on hand!!!
Lady Vivian
Joy L. Hale
Unless you are in love…?
Ron
I’ve always considered you to be one of the more accomplished poets here on the Den. I want to continue to grow and learn, but I'm afraid my skin is too thin to stand up to that kind of a scathing review.
Keep up the good work, you can't please everyone.
Thanks Dick
Thanks For Sharing.
Regards Steve
I loved this--a little different from your usualy prose--more free style and exquisitely expressed.
All the best,
Micki
I would start the poem with "Wild lavender violets" and end it with "And sunsets bathed in scarlet hues". The lines before the big stanza and after it don't do anything for the poem. They just seem to take up space. You can have those lines in the description or in a different font before the poem. Something like... My love. Let my gift be a rainbow of love.
I am not a fan of the line "Depending on mood or weather". It is not poetic really. And it sounds weak compared to your last line "And sunsets bathed in scarlet hues". “Blue eyes”, “Sometimes green”, and “Emerald like yours” don’t stand out either.
"And sunsets bathed in scarlet hues" is actually my most favorite line in the poem and I think it is the best one. I think all your lines in the poem should top this one. That would make the poem unforgettable and that much more beautiful.
Towards the end of your poem you write… "Orange tiger lilies bowing in the breeze" and "Sunsets bathed in scarlet hues". In these two lines you mention an object/thing (orange tiger lilies, sunsets) and attach an action verb after it (bowing, bathed). Why aren't you doing the same thing with the other lines in the poem? If you do that with the other lines in the poem, the poem will become that much better. It will instantly connect with the heart in a way it doesn’t right now. And the flow will be smoother too as it is not 100% smooth right now. I am not saying every line must have an action verb but if you are including an object/thing in your poem (like wild lavender violets, indigo skies, yellow fields of canola, etc.) then have it do something… like what you did with the sunsets and the orange tiger lilies. Hope you understand what I am trying to say here.
Well, I hope I have been of some help to you Regis. Let me know your thoughts on what I’ve shared with you regarding this poem.
Thanks for sharing and please keep on writing!!!!!
Forever your fan,
Lena
this is beautiful.
John
Cheers,
Dan
Take care,
Sherry
Very lovely!
Susan
The picture is the perfect backdrop. I like the mischievous side in your bio picture, too.
Connie
GOD BLESS YOU
Tony
Blessings,
Christine
luv,
et
:) Janna