strange how some poems can cause controversy (i guess that's in their nature)

Sorry, Ron, I guess I'm "cliquish" :) and don't get to review very often. Valerie, here is how I would re-write this for more more impact(and a few corrections) beautiful poem, btw:



My love misses you

My lips crave kissing you

My eyes adore every part of you



My finger-tips trace your face, an alabaster cloud;

hanging there in space;

the distance between you and I

means nothing,

the love we shared

bridges all eternity.



My true love dances under a plaid blue sky.

My feet kick and run on yellow sun-flamed stone...



I summon my love out loud, like a trumpet from this creole place

before destiny's cruel eyes of doom

that suffocate our once-sacred room



As the tides rush in from the muddy floor of the Mississippi River

soon we'll be together

without regret

we'll blend,

like lavender,

blown together in a feral wind



Enchanted spirits from far above,

skimming sapphire waters,

always, I will be haunting you... my love.

Some gorgeous descriptives and romantic strength. Really enjoyed your poem Valerie.

I'm really displeased that none of the cliquish regulars here have commented. I find your poem deeply charming in a down south Mississippi Delta sort of way. I wish others had as well.

Ron