The photo is the physical being of the words "the silence is deafening". The words bring me to tears as does the photo. I have one fortune cookie that made a lasting impression on me. It comes to mind with this photo, these words. I'm just paraphrasing but it went something like "If the eyes do not see it, how can the heart grieve for it." Lead to my Touch poem but my Touch doesn't touch this.
Axilea, you have captured the "organised chaos" of human emotions, reality (divided) and mind very well. When you move between West and East .......the surviving energy .......comes .......from "making sense to yourself".......
Thank you for sharing.
Isabella
You have most effectively brought to my mind the chaotic nature of this world which seems to perpetually prevent peace from prevaling at last. Thank you, Axilea. Love and best wishes,
Regis
Reviewed by D. Vegas (Reader)
Reviewed on February 20, 2013
Women doing harm to their bodies, not seeing all that they carry with them. Having a false reading of who they are.
As if seen from a blood smudged window of a speeding Humvee, the chaotic world roiling as if caught in a perpetual sandstorm. Much to think about. Thank you.
so many tragedies in the world that take place outside of the small cocoon that so many live in ~
You have captured so much here, you have such depth and heart.
Christine xx
Axilea, my sense of the photo is that of two jaded perspectives, though only one is wearing dark glass/blindfold. At this time I am unable to see a 'New Western Syntax', although I do see ever evolving western semantics. although semantics are constantly
evolving, refining in most languages. From my sense it is the result of political correctness, a cheap term in my view for a license to overtly deceive. An art form which politicos practice and are adept at. Semantics naturally evolve yet are also forced to change as factors affecting human perception evolve with technology and thus an ever increasing need for new words to provide the apt descriptions. You have masterfully woven many subjects into your poem. A wide range of human emotions and sociopolitical inferences and even religious persuasion. I have enjoyed this work as it is stimulating. I wish you love and peace my dear friend. Jon Michael
apart from the incisive lines themselves, Axilea,
the generous (and, to me, deliberate) spacing
between them encourages the reader to read between;
since the images are pithy each reader will read
in his or her particular way and conjure up the blanks
that need follow;
'mother tongue eradicated' suggest much to me
but i shan't elaborate; 'sacred goddess killed by anorexia'
elicits strong response, too, and 'glossolalia of pain'
is truly insightful
but the poem is more than its parts, its impact is pronounced;
there's a shift not just in economic weight but in cultural
awareness and in human focus
Powerful poem, Axilea. Speaks to me of frustration and of exploding technology causing more problems rather than less, and anger, yes, and a very visceral pain.
Without reading the others right now, I remain clueless as to your purpose to this poem.
Upon your comment, I find that you have created a list of words that comes to mind. My mind? Maybe not.
Contrary to Jerry in interpreting the image, but understanding from his previous work how he thinks, I would say that the blinders on the West come from our culture that thinks of itself as superior and therefore blind to the reality of most people in the East who are far more like us than different. By the same token, those from the East are often cloaked in their appearance by outside influences that control their every being except what can be seen in their eyes.
Thank you Charlie and Roger for finding your way through the maze (stream of consciousness) in such a vivid way. And many thanks to Jerry for exemplifying the last line of this "list of words". ;)
I understand none of what your list of words mean. Well, I do to a point. You said, "the photo is a good one, but I don't want it to restrict the meaning of the poem." But the photo IS the poem as far as I am concerned. The east goes into battle with eyes wide open, looking ahead for the prize, while the west closes its eyes to the evil being perpetuated.
I think every time I read this, I'll feel something different. Here's what's running through my mind right now: I am (and/or)we are bulimic consumers (and/or) pain devours and then regurgitates us. This is all done with words--thoughts, written, spoken, broken promises... (and/or) the ones we can't understand, even though our bodies/minds/souls are screaming them at us, killing us even. It is homicide! (and/or) cannibalism? --Charlie
Reviewed by RWE SAYS BYE (Reader)
Reviewed on February 15, 2013
listening in runs contrary to (stereo)typical label(ia) in (fe)mystical thought as a jeremiadumbration of meaning (de)mystifies to (l)end clarity in a po(em)lemical of major proportions tunes its(elf) to the minor end of the pent-up-tonic scale... edgy and all too (sur)real... It's syncing in...
Black white (well sort of pinkish) etcetera, Christian Muslim etcetera, Hetero-Homo-Metro Sexual, Physical, Mental, Ow! Includes all human rights violations I could think of.
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Thank you for sharing.
Isabella
Regis
Always,
Deborah
You have captured so much here, you have such depth and heart.
Christine xx
evolving, refining in most languages. From my sense it is the result of political correctness, a cheap term in my view for a license to overtly deceive. An art form which politicos practice and are adept at. Semantics naturally evolve yet are also forced to change as factors affecting human perception evolve with technology and thus an ever increasing need for new words to provide the apt descriptions. You have masterfully woven many subjects into your poem. A wide range of human emotions and sociopolitical inferences and even religious persuasion. I have enjoyed this work as it is stimulating. I wish you love and peace my dear friend. Jon Michael
budd
the generous (and, to me, deliberate) spacing
between them encourages the reader to read between;
since the images are pithy each reader will read
in his or her particular way and conjure up the blanks
that need follow;
'mother tongue eradicated' suggest much to me
but i shan't elaborate; 'sacred goddess killed by anorexia'
elicits strong response, too, and 'glossolalia of pain'
is truly insightful
but the poem is more than its parts, its impact is pronounced;
there's a shift not just in economic weight but in cultural
awareness and in human focus
kudos!
john
Chip BERGERON
Upon your comment, I find that you have created a list of words that comes to mind. My mind? Maybe not.
Contrary to Jerry in interpreting the image, but understanding from his previous work how he thinks, I would say that the blinders on the West come from our culture that thinks of itself as superior and therefore blind to the reality of most people in the East who are far more like us than different. By the same token, those from the East are often cloaked in their appearance by outside influences that control their every being except what can be seen in their eyes.
Ron
Axilea
Roger