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Saturday Dreamin'
by Patrick A Granfors → (All Poetry by Patrick A Granfors)
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To the tune of Jimmy Buffet's "Mother Ocean" Photo:altaic.wiki.wikispaces.com

I wish I had a dollar For every word you said You were always right And I was always wrong It didn’t matter what was in my head Saturday dreamin’ Sunday reprise I should have seen this coming A little bit every day When the look in your eye I could no longer deny Meant that you were never gonna’ stay Saturday dreamin’ Sunday reprise I put a message in a bottle I threw it in the sea But the current knew That you and I were through The bottle drifted right back to me Saturday dreamin’ Sunday reprise Doctor can you help me Cure me of this broken heart There has to be some way For you to mend it today I don’t even know where to start Saturday dreamin’ Sunday reprise Wish I could be forgiven But I know that it can never be I’ll keep my dreaming in season And pray for a reason That you’ll come back to me Saturday dreamin’ Sunday Reprise Copyright 2010 Patrick Granfors

Reviewed by Ronald Hull

Reviewed on July 17, 2010

I wish the same, but they're gone, like that frozen concoction that helps me hang on... Where is it? Why is the glass empty? Gone?

Ron

Reviewed by Peter Schlosser (Reader)

Reviewed on July 14, 2010

I knew you were a Jimmy Buffett fan! The beer/ burning up the roof thing gave you away.

Reviewed by Eileen Granfors

Why so pale and wan, fond lover, prithee why so pale?
(lyric from Sir John Suckling . . .name is the real one, I kid you not)

Reviewed by JASMIN HORST SEILER

I agree with Ed, but then it's hot out again, and in, ha great stuff Patrick. Blessings! Jasmin Horst

Reviewed by Mr. Ed

Sounds like the makins of a Country-Western Tune.

Reviewed by Paul Berube

Nicely done, Patrick.

Reviewed by Ed Matlack

Reviewed on July 13, 2010

"I put a message in a bottle
I threw it in the sea"

THAT is so littering...e

Reviewed by Karen Lynn Vidra, The Texas Tornado

Clever poem, Patrick; well done! Love the piccy~

(((HUGS))) and much love, your friend in Tx., Karen Lynn. ;D

Reviewed by Christine Tsen

This is as colorful and expressive as a full moon ~
Blessings,
Christine

Reviewed by Sage Sweetwater

Clever poetry in a mode of expression and communicative body language of the wolf alloting our fair companions and peers immunity from bad decisions decided under the guise of trickery from deceiving associates and con artists...introspective, savvy, and personal, this piece floats a timely message, purely dramatic and theatrical magic on all social levels, on the faith of forgiveness, it unquestionably delivers to your readers, lyrically redeeming Patrick...quintessential to positive interaction.

Love,
Sage