THAT DISTURBING PLACE. (poem) by John W Townsend on AuthorsDen

THAT DISTURBING PLACE.
by John W Townsend → (All Poetry by John W Townsend)
Rated "PG" by the Author.

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Sometimes we walk in dark, poorly lit areas, the like of which have tall buildings all around. As we walk our footsteps echo, not once but several times, here and there.

*In a hurry* *as evening falls* *take a short cut* *through the city sidewalks,* *shops all closing* *except 24-7* *its empty* *how does he make a living.* *Turn a corner* *unfriendly place* *crushed drinks cans* *litter the gutter,* *look around* *thought I heard someone* *makes you nervous* *when on your own.* *Pat my pockets* *ensure all is intact* *wallet my phone* *my keys all here,* *still feel someone* *behind me somewhere* *quickly look around* *no one there.* *Hurry my pace* *to get out of this place* *before paranoia* *makes me disgrace myself,* *never felt so ill at ease* *whats with this sidewalk* *where no one* *keeps following me.* *Relief as I see* *the end of the street* *I walk much faster* *so do those other feet,* *like a fool* *all hot and bothered* *get out of that place* *as fast as I could,* *yet as I do* *I look back uncertain* *the mind playing tricks* *wants to peer behind curtains* *change my mind quick,* *there's my bus* *I make a dash* *but still I still look back* *at the disturbing place,* *as I look* *the bus pulls away* *sure I saw a man waving at me* *from the dark alley.*

Reviewed by Ronald Hull

Reviewed on September 15, 2014

You kept the suspense going nicely until the nice little letdown twist at the end. Enjoyably spooky.

I think anyone would feel a bit paranoid in a place like that. Especially if it were devoid of other people and imaginary footsteps were heard but not seen.

Cool stuff.

Ron

Reviewed by Jerry Bolton

Hah! A person can't help buy get a bit paranoid in places such as that. Even after my two lost decades where I was a street guy completely and fear nothing, I believe I would get nervous in certain darkened surroundings.