CYBER CITY PARK
by Jansen Estrup
A place I've found again, anew
as varied as a child's dark grue.
visions there are wishfully wry,
devulge a joyful cup, a brew
of words to cause a mem'ries stew.
Like old men playing cards or squares
deal pawns and queens with carnal care,
They share a thought, a dream, some lies,
as peddlers raising armies dare
arrange a banner's caustic blare.
And yet collective wit have they
amassed through summed up year and day,
I find them apt with thought, and wise,
so ept at turning phrase and play
each one has something mute to say.
And so I wander glad each morn
among keyboards and synapse worn
the universe's ceaseless cries
thru eachothers' eyes forelorn
we mesh, collate, are dead and born
Akkadian, Marshman, travelers each
in wheel'd chairs, sweptup wing, afloatin' breech
and layer, tapper, awedged apogi(ees)
rooted well, a soaring reach
a forest park, a place to teach
That early feast and cryptic stroll
amongst towered spines and starry pall,
you rise up and in turn enthrawl
and so and so and so and I
do thank you each and one and all
2014
Forgive me in criticizing your poem. You did a great job. Suggestion=
I would remove all 3rd lines of all your verses to give musical rhythm
to your verses and it does not take away from your structure
Have a Good Pilgrim Darryl Ehlers
each one has something mute to say.
- I found this quite a thought-provoking line. Thank you. Kate
Regis
Seriously, I enjoy coming to this little Cyber Park every morning to see what serious writers like you have to say with your wisdom and experience. My only wish is that we actually could be under some beautiful virtual redwood trees dappled shade keep the sun out of our eyes as we drink a couple of java and enjoy swapping tales.
Ron
and it’s clear you’ve amassed enough of one
and lots more of the other.