The days are dimmed Life has less light Existence is becoming Lightless I Seldom see the sun Dawn is Dismal Dull Dark Damp Mist rules the river Below Moss is growing everywhere In cracks and fissures It is Dismal Dull Dark Damp I would like to hide There If I could Where May feels like November Your going Is taking your light with you And leaving Me In the dark How long before this hell Freezes over And all is numb Once more?
Darkness may turn into light at the blink of an eye. When it you at your darkest, nothing but to come out into the light and upward and try once more and leave that old ice age into a newer ice age.
This one gets me thinking. We are surely meant to cross roads with certain people. Some of those roads remain parallel over a lifetime while others venture off out of sight. "Meant to be" does so little to take the sting away when a road first curves. All we can do is glance ahead with hope. Hugs:) Sheila
This is good......a universal feeling unfortunately........we all need that connection once established........and when its withdrawn its rough......pax A
loved the imagery here
I felt like i had fallen
hand in moss
dark in a hole
knowing that,"the one"
could easily put their hands down and pull me back to the light
enjoyed you
Wow Regis,
I thought it would take me all night to read all your reviews for this one. I think that that means you have a great emotional piece here. But I am not surprised, all your works makes one stand up and pay attention. I felt a lot of pain in your heart as I read this poem. I wish you warmth, peace, and love.
Your bio picture is cool. You once had hair, and I once was thin, but no matter, we are still the same people inside.
Love and Blessings,
Judith
Wow.
My best work may get 10 reviews if I'm lucky.
I believe I'm #44 here.
Are you so good because of all the input?
But nobody need say anthing but "Wow" to your talent.
This captures the depths of the chill so well.
So "Wow" and hopes for warmer days.
John
This is a usual perspective for me, but it is hard for me to see it in you. You seem so nice. Can it be that you have a dark side too? I wonder if you, (like I) role play a bit to expand the area in which you write.
This is a great write. I enjoyed the way I was imediatly taken to another world and time.
WOW! Makes you think!
Brilliant poem Regis!
BRAVO***BRAVO***BRAVO***
Thanks for reviews!
Reviewed by William J. Cryer (Reader)
Reviewed on March 28, 2004
Prodigious work, man. This is awesome. The icy-freezing-numbness is already wrapping its dismal, dull, dark, damp tendrils of isolation around me. A perfect poem.
WOW, I like this one. Dark as hell too -- I am not the only one who can belt this kind of stuff off. But for a short poem this has an effect of an epic.
My goodness, Regis.. we poets often scrape our depths, rendering some aching words and recognizable emotions... but... somehow, reading this very moving sadness from you feels expecially sad... you have so quietly, yet so powerfully punctured that secret place we all have that makes us weep... beautiful.. and I do hope you are well. katy xox.
I felt as if I was reading this poem inside a cold, dank cave. Very powerful - very desolate.
Reviewed by Floria Kelderhouse (Reader)
Reviewed on March 27, 2004
I really felt this one Regis....
A loved one leaving can certainly
change our lives and put us in
the shadows...hopefully they
return...lovely.....floria
Yes, well done Regis! What a mood description! This world often gives me the wish to hibernate, to wake up to a real spring of life and get out of the Bush(es). Did you locate a nice cave already? Let's book cave space now, it might get overbooked soon! Love. Franz
the mood, alliteration and tone of the poem are outstanding ... the poetic vein, runs deep ...
Reviewed by Susan Sparks (Reader)
Reviewed on March 26, 2004
This is incredible how you have developed the mood.
Reviewed by Jane Rodway (Reader)
Reviewed on March 26, 2004
This is great, really brings across such a feeling of mood and depth. I liked the repetition of the :dismal, dull, dark, damp- really works well, especially with the form of the poem. You seem to have a knack for the perfect balance of descriptive words and images.
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This one gets me thinking. We are surely meant to cross roads with certain people. Some of those roads remain parallel over a lifetime while others venture off out of sight. "Meant to be" does so little to take the sting away when a road first curves. All we can do is glance ahead with hope. Hugs:) Sheila
Well done
john+
Thanks for your words of support at my den!!!!!!
I felt like i had fallen
hand in moss
dark in a hole
knowing that,"the one"
could easily put their hands down and pull me back to the light
enjoyed you
I thought it would take me all night to read all your reviews for this one. I think that that means you have a great emotional piece here. But I am not surprised, all your works makes one stand up and pay attention. I felt a lot of pain in your heart as I read this poem. I wish you warmth, peace, and love.
Your bio picture is cool. You once had hair, and I once was thin, but no matter, we are still the same people inside.
Love and Blessings,
Judith
Gina
Vesna :)
My best work may get 10 reviews if I'm lucky.
I believe I'm #44 here.
Are you so good because of all the input?
But nobody need say anthing but "Wow" to your talent.
This captures the depths of the chill so well.
So "Wow" and hopes for warmer days.
John
This is a great write. I enjoyed the way I was imediatly taken to another world and time.
Poetic excellence - superlative prose!
Robert
Blessings,
ann
BTW Love your profile pic......hubba hubba! ;)
Brilliant poem Regis!
BRAVO***BRAVO***BRAVO***
Thanks for reviews!
Laura
Excellent writing ... you had me going ...
This is excellent poetry, Regis!
So wonderfully written!
Love, Sheila
~Rose~
Excellent!
TRASK
Reindeer
Wow you outdone yourelf here,,,,,lol!!
Just joking...but this is magnifecent buddy!!
Gratefully yours in love and peace :)!!
Love Tionka
(((HUGS))) and love, ton ami a Texas, Karen Lynn. :D
Amour et paix a toi!
A loved one leaving can certainly
change our lives and put us in
the shadows...hopefully they
return...lovely.....floria
Gotta hold on, peace and love to you
Ch'erie
Carmen :-)
yearning that I hope will be fulfilled soon.